Hello,
i want to apply to university and have to hand in a letter of motivation. I have been working on this first version for a while. I started with some brainstorming and wrote down all the things that interested me, what i have done before, what i want to achieve and also asked my friends to descirbe me. I am pretty fluent in speaking, but have problems in writing, especially with grammar. So i did some research on the internet and wrote down some phrases that i like and used them for my essay. I hope that is ok, as i still worked out the letter by myself. I would appreciate if someone could have a look and give me some advices how to improve my LOM.
I am planning to send this letter to a british and an american friend too and also to hand it in to my former english teacher, so they might be able to help me too.
The letter is not really done yet, as i still want to bring in my interest in computers, internet (communication), organising (i used to organise trips with my friends, like a trip to six flag to with 25 people, or a trip to netherlands for 5 days with a group of friends) and that i have been class representative and usually also the one, who my friends came up to with their worries. But i dont know where to fit that paragraph in yet and how to build it up. I also think my letter is getting pretty long, can you help me to find parts, which i can cut out or shorten?
THANKS IN ADVANCE
cookey
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Dear ladies and gentlemen
With this letter I would like to explain my motivation for studying International Business in general and why I chose the UM:
After completing secondary School with the German diploma ‘Abitur’ in the summer of 2004, I would like to continue my education at an institution of higher education, to obtain a Bachelor of Science in International Business. In particular, I am interested in learning more about the structure and organization of a company, economical processes (in general), global economic coherences and communications, new cultures and languages. I also want do develop my methodical abilities and soft skills. Thereafter I want to use the acquired knowledge to continue in a masters program of business, aiming to be well prepared to enter the business world. My long-term goal is to enrich an international operating company or to start as an independent entrepreneur, bringing in new ideas and an efficient working style gained through my higher education hopefully started at the UM
Looking at my career aspiration as a child, one would think they were totally contradicting. I was torn between the wishes to become an architect, bank clerk, lawyer and a “stewardess”, or more proper flight attendant. At first sight these professions are not able to be reconciled, but looking at the main characteristics of each profession a slight direction towards the essential attributes of an international business graduate is shown.
An Architect is creative, but also has to be accurate. The Bank clerk in my eyes was that business person in a suit who juggles with numbers and who is known as a logical thinker. The lawyer represents the interest in working within guidelines and the attitude to vouch for something, as well as the motivation to convince people of ones view. The stewardess is the profession which is most contrary to the others. Flexibility and mobility are her main attributes, as she is always on the way and has to be ready to be confronted with all kind of people of different backgrounds. She has to handle the most various and unexpected situations, while collaborating with others and leading a (passenger) crowd.
All these professions of my early admiration and the characteristics which are brought along with them seemed to have caught my attention as a child and started to develop to my own interests and skills while growing up.
My affection to travelling and exploring new cultures was invoked through travelling with my family. While my friends mostly went to the same places every year for one or two weeks, I had spent my vacations in a different country every other year and usually for the whole summer. My parents originally come from the Philippines which explains why we often went there for a longer period. As many of my relatives emigrated out of the Philippines too and are spread all over the world, I had been visiting them throughout the past years in the USA, Austria, Italy, Canada and many other countries.
The interest in languages was there since I have started to talk, as I have been raised trilingual: English, German (in which I am fluently) and Ilocano (Philippine dialect).This interest increased even more during high school. I always loved to speak English with my cousins and friends and later English was my favourite subject besides math, which explains why I chose those subjects as my A-level courses. Knowing that Latin is the foundation of most languages I picked it as my second foreign language at school. Furthermore did I participate in an unsolicited Spanish course after regular class and added French in an evening school for two semesters. Starting in the mid of February I will refresh my Spanish knowledge in an intensive Spanish course, which I will be going to twice a week. When I started my occupation as an assistant in a department of international import, I came up with the idea of learning Chinese or Japanese. This new aim and interest was aroused through my contact to our suppliers and partners from all over the world and especially from Asia.
Besides my above mentioned current employment in the merchandise centre of the international company OBI (German’s leading company of building centres), I have also earned several experiences in other areas. I was working in the areas of tourism (side job as a waitress and three summers as an assistant life guard), sports (voluntary swimming coach in the German life savers association - DLRG), advertising (internship in an online advertising company) and in a department of quality control. All these different jobs taught me responsibility, working within guidelines, to be accurate, how to motivate others and how to balance my time and priorities.
But the working experience which influenced me most and which taught me mobility and independence was my experience with the organization CA. Motivated by my passion for travelling and cultures, but most of all because of my first independent trip to Canada and my school exchange to Reading in England, I always wanted to go abroad for a longer period after high school. So after graduating last year I went to a summer camp in Monticello, in New York State, and worked as a life guard, swimming coach and counsellor for two months.
Living together with children for eight weeks and collaborating with counsellors from all over the world, consequential from various social and ethnic backgrounds, I had to face an exciting new challenge. At the end of camp though and after my travelling session across the USA and Canada to visit friends and relatives (for two more months) I could look back on a summer full of new experiences, memories and friends from all over the world. Working with children of the ages between seven to seventeen twenty-four hours almost seven days a week surely nurtured my creative side, as I always had to find a new way of entertaining them. I also have learned to be a role model, to lead a crowd, to co-operate, to mediate and to solve problems and most of all to be flexible and open towards new people and for ways of handling new situations.
Due to the international orientation of the UM I believe that the offered International business program is totally suitable for me. It combines my passion for global communication, international mobility and multicultural environment, as well as my impulse of organizing and leading projects, in a professional way. Through my experiences in several jobs, my temporarily employment abroad and my continuous voluntary work I learned the values of commitment, teamwork and of independence. These values represent the most important requirements to study on the principles of problem based learning (PBL), which makes me accomplish the expectations of the educational system, taught at the UM.
I am confident that with my strong motivation, my personality, my international and significant practical experiences and with the International Business program on top, I will have a solid foundation for a successful and fulfilling career, in which I plan to weld relationships across cultures and ensure that intercultural communication takes place effectively.
Enclosed you will find all required documents for the International Business program. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application. I look forward to a positive response and to a great time in an outstanding educational program at the UM.
Yours respectfully,
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I dindt write the full name of the university and the organisation, i will do that in my finished letter.
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