Letter Proofreading

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Hungry  #422259  Fri, 21 Sep 07 11:52 PM

Hi,

Will someone please see if anything breaks or sounds unnatural in the letter below?

Dear Sir,

Please be informed that I have altered my personal signature, for I have forgotten the previous one. Therefore, kindly accept the new one from now on.

 

Please contact me on ________, should you require further clarification on this matter.

 

Yours Faithfully,

XYZ

 

Great regards, Hungry

  
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Clive  #422265  Sat, 22 Sep 07 12:23 AM

Hi,

Dear Sir,

Please be informed that I have altered my personal signature, for I have forgotten the previous one. Therefore, kindly accept the new one from now on.

Please contact me on ________, should you require further clarification on this matter.

Yours Faithfully,

XYZ

Dear Sir,

Please note that I have changed my personal signature, because I have forgotten the previous one. Therefore, kindly accept the new one, as shown below, from now on.

Please contact me at  ________, should you require further clarification of/in this matter.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

This all seems quite odd to me. Surely such matters have to involve personal contact, eg you have to go there in person, and give them a new sample signature? How will they know this letter is not written and signed by an impostor?

Should you not provide more specifics, eg your account number if you are writing to your bank? Why do they have your signature?

In addition, I have never heard of anyone forgetting their signature.

Best wishes, Clive

  
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Hungry  #422272  Sat, 22 Sep 07 01:10 AM

Lots of thanks for giving me the help, Clive.

This seems odd to me too, but someone actually asked me write it for him.

Great regards, Hungry

  
Yoong Liat  #422357  Sat, 22 Sep 07 12:16 PM
 Clive wrote:

Hi,

Please contact me on ________, should you require further clarification on this matter.

Yours Faithfully,

XYZ

Please contact me at  ________, should you require further clarification of/in this matter.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ



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Hungry  #423644  Wed, 26 Sep 07 04:01 AM

Thanks for contributing to the post, YL.Smile [:)]

  
Yoong Liat  #423657  Wed, 26 Sep 07 05:01 AM
You're welcome.
  
Neeraj Jain  #423744  Wed, 26 Sep 07 09:13 AM
I agree with Clive.
  
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