Hi,

Today  I had to summarize a medical article using as much linkwords as I could. Could you please let me know whether what I wrote is grammatically OK.

Thanks

Here's the text :

Some hypolipidemic drugs, i.e. statins and fibrates, occasionally create adverse side effects in patients, especially myalgia.

Up to 7 % of the people taking one of these drugs may experience mild myalgia, in other words moderate muscular symptoms. Furthermore, 0.1 % of the patients experience severe myalgia. Even though these symptoms are idiopathic there are nevertheless many known risk factors, such as age, gender, body weight and certain specific medical troubles. Although rhabdomyolysis is a very serious condition, it is not always fatal.

As for the rest of the population, these drugs are usually well-tolerated.

These symptoms used to be overlooked in the past, whereas they are now seriously taken into account, as this study shows.

Cheyenne

Hi Cheyenne,

Your text is gramatically correct, although the word choices you used may not be the best.  If you are trying to write in an academic setting, generally it is helpful to use more formal connecting words.  For example, when you say "especially", it would be more appropriate to say, "in particular."  I know that this is nit-picky, but if you want to sound professional, you need to use formal language.  It would be better to say, instead of "in other words", the phrase " defined by/as."   Also, you need commas around nevertheless - "Even though these symptoms are idiopathic, there are, nevertheless, many known risk factors ..."

I hope this helps out,

Di