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Latest post Mon, Oct 27 2008 6:57 PM by gorodman. 2 replies.
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gorodman  +  580618 Mon, 27 Oct 08 07:36 AM
Hi there! Could you be so kind to check my motivation letter. I will be really glad to see any comments. I also hope my letter will bring to someone an idea what to write in his letter of motivation. Thanks a lot





Dear Sir/Madam,


I am writing to you because I have a strong desire to study in *** Program. My dream is to be a high qualified manager. I want to be a specialist who has thorough understanding of how the manufacturing and business processes are organized and who is able to use control mechanisms and a high-level strategic underpinning in project management.

While studying in *** I have made great strides. I can even say that I have become one of the best students of the university. I have been always maintaining an excellent grade average. I have achieved several academic honors. After I finished the first academic year I was the only student on faculty who was transferred to the free course, i.e. since that moment the government started to cover my education expenses. Moreover, I was awarded to several scholarships as a student with excellent academic progress.

In order to be a high achiever and to be able to solve the problems which nobody could solve before I have to use such good qualities as extreme industry and purposefulness, high level of Emotional Intelligence and self-motivation. The work in student public organization brought me an experience of how to communicate with people and how to get together quickly a group of fellows and motivate them to work hard in order to fulfil a project in a fixed hour. While sports activities have always charged me with positive energy and strengthened my willpower.

In the end I should notice that it is really important for me to receive *** scholarship because my financial condition can not afford me to pursue any abroad study programs.

Obtaining a quality of *** from your university will not only strengthen my knowledge but will also help me to fulfil my dream to become a world level top manager. I thank you for the time you spend reading this letter. I am looking forward to a positive response.

Yours sincerely,

***

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Anonymous, 1 yr 12 days ago
hey, the letter is good. At least for me. I'd say, however, that you wrote too much about how great you are and can do. i mean it is ok to do so- but not so explicitely. it strikes me the most. Otherwise great. Good job. Remember that's my own opinion and others may not agree with me :))
gorodman  +  580774 Mon, 27 Oct 08 06:57 PM
Thanks for your comment! You are quete right. I'll try to remake the letter according to your remark.
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