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otto4u  +  621610 Thu, 25 Dec 08 08:04 PM

 

 

Date: -

 

 

Please correct my letter if there are any mistakes.

I will be very thankful to you.

 

Dear Sir/Madam,

 

 

                                                

Sub: - Requesting Admission

 

 

 

My name is  ** and I have done my High School and received Senior Secondary School Certificate from **,**. I would like to apply for an Undergraduate program in Mechanical Engineering at **. I have a very good command of English language but require training in Dutch language to pursue.

 

I have always aspired to become an engineer to revolutionize the world with my knowledge. Today we take or use most of over everyday objects for granted which are in fact results of persistent efforts by engineers and scientists.  My ambition is also to become part of this multicultural squad at **.  Knowing about engines was always my first preference whether in the form of aircraft, automobile, generators to petroleum machines and even toy cars. ** is an excellent platform for Technical Studies. I have always been good at tending practicals but theory is something a bit hard to grasp, but, nevertheless, I managed it quite consistently.

 

Proposing to Study at ** is a result of through evaluation of many universities and a few destinations. It was hard to select as there are lot of opportunities, but I found Netherlands among the best ones. The main reason for selecting Netherlands is a crave for uniqueness and something different while not shifting away from my main objective.  Especially, when, there are only few options known to my community and still old notions are prevalent, for example UK, USA, Canada and Australia are considered epitome of good educational destinations in whole Middle East and South Asia, and in many other places too. Even I was victim of these notions until I just stumbled upon the fact that there are other great destinations too, that provide same standards with complete different perspective. I just want to shift from English speaking institutions to other languages while not compromising the quality of education and ***** is an excellent choice. It’ll be a great feeling to study my desired program in a complete different environment than I am used to, at the same time not compromising the quality of education. Accept for the weather and cost of living, everything I urged is found in Netherlands.

 

Studying at ** will also help to encourage the concept of studying in the countries other than USA or UK in my community and it will give me an opportunity of break my boundaries of cultural understanding and open the way for other destinations for my community.

 

I hope I’ll be selected as a applicant for the year 2009/10 academic year. I also understand that my marks may not be sufficient or my degree may not be considered equivalent to Dutch diploma but I can assure you that I’ll prove a valuable student provided that I must be given a chance through entrance examination or other mode of testing.

 

I have carried an earnest effort to provide you with my full educational Details and all required documents. Even if, unintentionally, I forget to provide any documents or information, kindly contact me through the following addresses,

Contact: - 00 00 00 00

                 00 00 00 00     

Email: - ** or ** (I regularly check both of these Emails)

I hope to hear from you in near future. Thanks in advance for reading my letter.

 

 

 

With Regards,

 

 

 

**

 

 

 

 

 

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reefannie  +  639751 Mon, 12 Jan 09 09:27 AM
 My name is  ** and I have done completed my High School and received a Senior Secondary School Certificate from **,**. I would like to apply for an undergraduate program in Mechanical Engineering at **. I have a very good command of the English language, but require training in Dutch language to pursue this endeavor.

 I have always aspired to become an engineer to revolutionize the world with my knowledge. Today we take, or use, most of our everyday objects for granted, which are in fact results of persistent efforts by engineers and scientists.  My ambition is also to become part of this the multicultural squad at **.  Knowing about engines was always my first preference whether in the form of aircraft, automobile, generators to petroleum machines and even toy cars. ** is an excellent platform for Technical Studies. I have always been good at tending practicals, but theory is something a bit harddifficult to grasp, but, nevertheless however, I managed it quite consistently.

 Proposing to study at ** is a result of thorough evaluation of many universities and a few destinations. It was a difficult hard to selection as there are many lot of opportunities, but I found the Netherlands among the best ones. The main reason for selecting the Netherlands is a crave yearning for uniqueness and something different while not shifting away from my main objective.  Especially, when, there are only few options known to my community and still old notions are prevalent. for example UK, USA, Canada and Australia are considered epitome of good educational destinations in whole Middle East and South Asia, and in many other places too. Even I was victim of these notions until I just stumbled upon the fact that there are other great destinations too, that provide same standards with complete different perspective. I just want wish to shift from English speaking institutions to other languages while not compromising the quality of education and I feel ***** is an excellent choice. It’ll be a great feeling to study my desired program in a completely different environment than I am used to, and at the same time not compromising the quality of education. Accept for the weather and cost of living, everything I urged is found in Netherlands.

 Studying at ** will also help to encourage the concept of studying in the countries other than USA or UK in my community and it will give me an opportunity of break my boundaries of cultural understanding and open the way for other destinations for my community.

 I hope I’ll be selected as a applicant for the year 2009/10 academic year. I also understand that my marks may not be sufficient, or my degree may not be considered equivalent to a Dutch diploma, but I can assure you that I’ll prove a valuable student provided that I must be given a chance through entrance examination or other mode of testing.

 I have carried an earnest effort to provide you with my full educational details and all required documents. Even if, unintentionally, If I forget to provide any documents or information, kindly contact me through the following addresses,

Contact: - 00 00 00 00

                 00 00 00 00     

Email: - ** or ** (I regularly check both of these Emails)

I hope to hear from you soon.  in near future. Thank you for your time.s in advance for reading my letter.


Hope this helps you!  Best of luck on this.

K.

=^^=

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reefannie  +  639752 Mon, 12 Jan 09 09:30 AM
Accept for the weather and cost of living, everything I urged is found in Netherlands.

Oops!
This should have been omitted.  Sorry!

^^


Sleep
otto4u  +  639763 Mon, 12 Jan 09 09:44 AM
I just lost the hope!!
I thought nobody will reply.
I'av posted this a more than a month ago!!lol
Thankyou very muchh reefannie!!!
SmileBig SmileWinkCryingAngelHeartHeart

thankss!!Crying
 
Afrim  +  670683 Thu, 12 Feb 09 01:59 PM
please help

i need to replay as short as possible in two questiones, what do you think about this?

description of motivation:
Since 1998 I’ve been working in different organizations on a various projects. From the very beginning I was fascinated with the projects’ magnitude and importance for the society and I was proud to work in those projects. It is rewarding to see the ideas outlined in the initial project papers convert into reality, and to realize that I am a part of this process. Recently I’m deeply involved in drafting and implementation of various projects for the regional center were I feel urge to get better insight into advanced project cycle management. Accomplishing this advanced training will enable me to achieve a broader knowledge on development issues and project management.

and

description of relevance of activity:
In the last two years I have been deeply involved in project drafting and implementing, also coordinating projects at the regional level. An advanced training on “Project Cycle Management” will strengthen my professional position and the mission will benefit as well.

thanks!!!
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Anonymous, 273 days ago

 Could  you please proofread this letter of motivation? I'd be very grateful.

 

 

With this letter, I would like to apply for a scholarship to International Baccalaureate Diploma programme. I learnt about it at  an educational fair and got very concerned about it.I’ve spent a lot of time thinking about my future education and career. I’ve made up my mind that I really want to get a first-class education and I consider the IB programme as a step that will help me achieve my goal. I have analyzed my personal achievements and characteristics and to my mind they meet the requirements of the programme. To start with, I attended school №1270 in Moscow that specializes in English for 8 years. And now I’m in the 9th form of lyceum № 1535. It offers a wide range of compulsory subjects (such as Russian, Geometry, Geography, History) and optional activities. My optional subject is economics and I have 4 hours of it per week. I believe, it is extremely useful for me to study economics now because I think my future studies will be closely connected with it. Moreover, it is one of the most exhilarating subjects. Among other subjects that I enjoy are History, Geography, German, English and Maths. By and large I am really well rounded and   I find the entire curriculum quite captivating. The only subject that seems extremely uninteresting and challenging to me is Physics  Besides, I don’t only do what is required at school. I am quite open for challenging tasks, which I see as a foundation of my life experience. I take part in lots extracurricular activities. For instance, I participated in the conference «Scientific works of the youth» with a research of the electromagnetic radiation and its influence on organisms.  Furthermore, I have taken part in competitions in Maths, Russian, economics (I have taken a second place in the economics regional Olympiad)As to my knowledge, of English I believe it is sufficient to do well in the IB. Though I have not taken any international exams yet, I have participated in various English language contests and have achieved some good results. For example, after having got the 2nd place in the regional tournament I participated in the Moscow City Olympiad in Foreign languages and won a third prize there.Despite the challenging course at school that requires quite a lot of homework I still have some free time which I dedicate to improving my English and German. Besides, this year I have taken up tennis and really indulge myself in it. It helps me to relax and to forget about my everyday problems. Moreover, I’m not only active academically and physically, I also take an interest in social activities. I relish helping organize various school events and writing articles to the school newspaper.As for my personal characteristics I may say that the most vivid one is that I am very persevering and persistent. If decide to take something up I put in a lot of effort to achieve good results in it.  I am really committed and capable of standing upon my individual point of view as well as being flexible to the ever-changing environment.  So that’s why I believe that I am the appropriate candidate and deserve to get the scholarship. But what is it that makes the IB programme suitable to me? First, I’ll  be able to enhance my English. Then, i will get an opportunity to develop my communication skills with students from all over the world. Last but not least, I will get high quality knowledge, awesome practical experience and deep understanding of the subjects I will choose to study. And surely I consider that the CAS (creativity, action, service) system and the philosophical approach to the Theory of Knowledge are bound to be a successful foundation of my future life.   

 

otto4u  +  679922 Wed, 25 Feb 09 12:59 PM
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 (Appropriate subject, for e.g. Sub: - Application for IB Diploma program)

 With this letter, (we might not need it)I would like to apply for a scholarship to from International Baccalaureate in Diploma programme. I have learnt about it at in an educational fair and got very concerned about it and became determined to apply.I’ve spent a lot of time thinking about my future education and career. I’ve made up my mind that I really want to get a first-class education and I consider the IB programme as a step that will help me achieve my goal. I have always craved to achieve first-class education which made me to think about IB programme as the prior step to assist me in achieving my goal. I have analyzed my personal achievements and I affirm that and characteristics and to my mind they meet the requirements of the programme.

To start with, I attended school №1270 (please mention the name rather than no.s)in Moscow that specializes in English for 8 years. And now I’m in the 9th form of lyceum № 1535(sorry, I didn’t understand why you used the word ‘lyceum’ here). It offers a wide range of compulsory (they know that you are talking about compulsory ones) subjects (such as Russian, Geometry, Geography, History) and along with optional activities. My optional subject is economics and I have 4 hours of it per week. I believe that it is an extremely important subject for me useful for me to study economics now because I think my future studies will be are closely connected with it(think again, this sentence doesn’t suit here, remove the entire sentence if possible). Moreover, it is one of the most exhilarating exciting subjects as far as I am concerned. Among other subjects that I enjoy are History, Geography, German, English and Math’s.

By and large, I am really well rounded and   I find the entire curriculum quite captivating. The only subject that seems extremely uninteresting and challenging to me is Physics. Besides, I don’t only do what is required at school (interchange above 2 lines, write this line after “quite captivating”). I am quite open for challenging tasks, which I see as a foundation of my life experience. I take part in lot of extracurricular activities. For instance, I participated in the conference titled «Scientific works of the youth» concerned with a research of the electromagnetic radiation and its influence on organisms.  Furthermore, I have taken part in various competitions viz. in Maths, Russian, economics (I have taken a secured second place in the economics regional Olympiad).As to my knowledge of English I believe that it is sufficient enough to do well in the IB. Though I have not taken any international exams yet, I have participated in various English language contests and have achieved some very good results. For example, after having got attaining the 2nd place in the regional tournament, I’ve participated in the Moscow City Olympiad in Foreign languages and won third prize. Despite the challenging course at school that requires quite to do a lot of homework, I still have had some free time which I dedicated to improve my English and German. Besides, Furthermore, this year I have taken up tennis and really indulge myself in it. It helps me to relax and to forget about my everyday problems (they need only the most relevant information).

Moreover, I’m not only active academically and physically, I also take an interest in social activities. I relish helping to organize various school events and writing articles to the school newspaper. As for my personal characteristics I may say that the most vivid one is that I am very persevering and persistent. If I decide to take something up, I put in a lot of effort to achieve good results in it.  I am really committed and capable of standing firm on my perspective and also upon my individual point of view as well as being flexible to the ever-changing environment.  

So that’s why I believe that I am an appropriate suitable candidate and deserve to get the scholarship. But what is it, that makes the IB programme suitable to me? First, I’ll be able to enhance my English. Then secondly, I will get an opportunity to develop my communication skills with students from all over the world. Last but not least, I will get high quality knowledge education, awesome relevant practical experience and deep understanding of the subjects I will choose to study. And surely I consider believe that the CAS (creativity, action, service) system and the philosophical approach to the Theory of Knowledge are bound to be the successful foundation of  for my future life.   

 I hope it'll help you!!!!

otto4u, 269 days ago
sorry,i'll post it again!!!
actually it didnt printed strik throughed lines
otto4u  +  679925 Wed, 25 Feb 09 01:06 PM
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 (Appropriate subject, for e.g. Sub: - Application for IB Diploma program)

 With this letter, (we might not need it)I would like to apply for a scholarship to from International Baccalaureate in Diploma programme. I have learnt about it at in an educational fair and got very concerned about it and became determined to apply.I’ve spent a lot of time thinking about my future education and career. I’ve made up my mind that I really want to get a first-class education and I consider the IB programme as a step that will help me achieve my goal. I have always craved to achieve first-class education which made me to think about IB programme as the prior step to assist me in achieving my goal. I have analyzed my personal achievements and I affirm that and characteristics and to my mind they meet the requirements of the programme.

To start with, I attended school №1270 (please mention the name rather than no.s)in Moscow that specializes in English for 8 years. And now I’m in the 9th form of lyceum № 1535(sorry, I didn’t understand why you used the word ‘lyceum’ here). It offers a wide range of compulsory (they know that you are talking about compulsory ones) subjects (such as Russian, Geometry, Geography, History) and along with optional activities. My optional subject is economics and I have 4 hours of it per week. I believe that it is an extremely important subject for me useful for me to study economics now because I think my future studies will be are closely connected with it(think again, this sentence doesn’t suit here, remove the entire sentence if possible). Moreover, it is one of the most exhilarating exciting subjects as far as I am concerned. Among other subjects that I enjoy are History, Geography, German, English and Math’s.

By and large, I am really well rounded and   I find the entire curriculum quite captivating. The only subject that seems extremely uninteresting and challenging to me is Physics. Besides, I don’t only do what is required at school (interchange above 2 lines, write this line after “quite captivating”). I am quite open for challenging tasks, which I see as a foundation of my life experience. I take part in lot of extracurricular activities. For instance, I participated in the conference titled «Scientific works of the youth» concerned with a research of the electromagnetic radiation and its influence on organisms.  Furthermore, I have taken part in various competitions viz. in Maths, Russian, economics (I have taken a secured second place in the economics regional Olympiad).As to my knowledge of English I believe that it is sufficient enough to do well in the IB. Though I have not taken any international exams yet, I have participated in various English language contests and have achieved some very good results. For example, after having got attaining the 2nd place in the regional tournament, I’ve participated in the Moscow City Olympiad in Foreign languages and won third prize. Despite the challenging course at school that requires quite to do a lot of homework, I still have had some free time which I dedicated to improve my English and German. Besides, Furthermore, this year I have taken up tennis and really indulge myself in it. It helps me to relax and to forget about my everyday problems (they need only the most relevant information).

Moreover, I’m not only active academically and physically, I also take an interest in social activities. I relish helping to organize various school events and writing articles to the school newspaper. As for my personal characteristics I may say that the most vivid one is that I am very persevering and persistent. If I decide to take something up, I put in a lot of effort to achieve good results in it.  I am really committed and capable of standing firm on my perspective and also upon my individual point of view as well as being flexible to the ever-changing environment.  

So that’s why I believe that I am an appropriate suitable candidate and deserve to get the scholarship. But what is it, that makes the IB programme suitable to me? First, I’ll be able to enhance my English. Then secondly, I will get an opportunity to develop my communication skills with students from all over the world. Last but not least, I will get high quality knowledge education, awesome relevant practical experience and deep understanding of the subjects I will choose to study. And surely I consider believe that the CAS (creativity, action, service) system and the philosophical approach to the Theory of Knowledge are bound to be the successful foundation of  for my future life.   

 

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