Dear Ms/Mr [find his or her name…also if it is a “she” use Ms. unless she prefers Mrs.]
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I am exciting to be applying for an internship to laboratory and joining your team. [there is no English word “practicant”, I think you meant “intern”].
As part of my training, I am required to complete a practical course in a laboratory for least three months. I would great appreciate the opportunity to be a member of your working group. That would complete my practical experience requirement and more importantly would provide me with invaluable experience and contacts, both of which are highly valued.
During my five semesters of study I have acquired a strong [or superior] knowledge of human and cell biology, microbiology and physiology as well as biochemistry and molecular genetics. During my training I have obtained basic practical experience as a scientist as well as a team worker. [no exclamation marks] [2]
I am motivated and curious person who can easily adapt to any situation. I thrive on overcoming challenges. My coworkers know me to be a very effective and helpful team player. I enjoy learning from others and helping others where I can. I am excited by the opportunity to join a group of professional where I can apply my skills, talents, and enthusiasm.
[I hope You will help me cover this step of my education and personal experience. –delete this sentence. You want to show them why and how you will help them. Don’t ask for their pity so that they hire you. Show them your enthusiasm and knowledge.]
I will call you in two weeks to arrange an interview. I look forward to meeting you.[3]
Sincerely,
Yanakieva
Watch your spelling and capitalizations. No exclamation marks, smiley faces, or anything else.
I have made some changes and put in some words for you. See if my words capture your intent.
I love your enthusiasm and passion. If I am hiring someone, I want to see that they have a passion for their chosen career. I want to know that they are excited by what they are doing. Your letter has that. I think that’s great.
1) In North America, we place a colon after the name. Dear Mr. Jones: , but the European practice might be/is different. Nona the brit and I have had discussions on this topic. So you need to check to see how the formatting is handled in your location. If you were in North America, you’d use a colon.
2) I think you can delete the last sentence in this paragraph as we capture the team player stuff in the next paragraph. Part of me wants you expand your background more. Tell them more about you. But other part of me says no, because you just want to get their attention so that you can get an interview with them. You can think about it.
3) You definitely want to contact them. You have all this enthusiasm, excitement, and initiative. Now follow it up with a real live example. Show them that you are willing to pick up the ball and run with it.
I like your letter. It’s short, to the point, focused, and shows lots of enthusiasm. Now you just got follow that up.
MountainHiker