Motivation letter

As a personal goal I have set a task to develop my life as an active participant in social and cultural life. [what are the alternatives?] A rational decision was to take a course that would provide with opportunities to broaden my mind not only in specific area of studies, but also with wide spectrum of practice possibilities.[I've got no idea what you are saying there.] Therefore, I have chosen the most suitable courses your university has to offer. I decided to go in for Human Recources Management, Journalism and Public Relations, Public Relations. [you need to watch your spelling. And you need to have more conviction and PICK ONE of those.]

These studies are new and have no strong educational base in my country.[not sure what you mean] This is one of the reasons why I chose to study in Great Britain.[?] Moreover, it has always been my dream to study abroad, gain experience and knowedge and return to my homeland as an irreplaceable worker and member of society, who has got appropriate mental outfit to become beneficial to his country. [I think you meant to say, You wish to study in Great Britian and return to country X with your advanced skills.]

Despite the fact that there are many universities in Great Britain, I have decided to go to xxx university, because I consider it to be modern, thus suitable for self-dependent [independent] student who wants to climb the career ladder independently [is there any other way?]. [I think your statements apply to all universities.] In addition, I hope to be an participate participant in university events in order to learn more about your beautiful country. [, fulfil the need to socialise and to adapt to unfamiliar surroundings quickly.--delete all this stuff]

My work experience dates back to the year 2002 when I started working in a quarterly magazine as a typist and I have been working there ever since. I also have experience working in a café in the past two years. I learned how to act in unfavourable situations and how to treat customers to make them feel satisfied. It was valuable experience.

Since my childhood I have a strong sense of determination to succeed in the areas that I have chosen. Such experiences shaped my character and added responsibility to my actions. I can take responsibilities and reach visible results. The proof of it can be seen both in studies and work.

Thank You for Your time and considering my application. I will be looking forward to Your reply impatiently.

Yours faithfully,


There might be a lot of cultural differences. But I think your letter needs a lot of work. Have a look at some of the other motivation letters that are being worked on in this forum. Also, have a look at Personal Statement.