Hi everybody!
This is my first post in this excellent form! I cannot believe I have not been here before! There is so much to learn here...
I have to submit a motivation letter for the Erasmus University Rotterdam where I would like to study. The admission procedure consists of one single letter, which gives it a pretty big importance. Thats why I would be better if someone could read over it and help me with the difficult stuff.. Thanks!
Here is it:
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am hereby applying for entrance for the
International business administration program at the Erasmus University
Rotterdam (EUR) in September 2007.In the following letter I will explain why
I think that the EUR is the ideal university for me.
First of all, I would like to give you some
background information about me.
I was raised in a small town called
Schwenningen, situated in the South of Germany. Although every one in my family
is German, my parents made me come in touch with foreign languages from an
early age. Even before primary education, we listened to an English teaching program.
Later, at school, I was a quick learner and the foreign languages rapidly became
my favorite and best subjects.
I participated at several school exchanges
to France and England before spending one year in America
as an exchange student, living in an American family, attending High School and
experiencing the American way of life. All these stays abroad made me more open to
the world and ultimately, more curious to experience more.
One among many highlights in the US was the
participation at the DECA state championships; a competition for all business
and marketing students in the whole state. I was fascinated about how
businesses operated, how marketing worked and how everybody could be
unconsciously influenced. At this point, I realized that I wanted to do
something with business in the future. Ever since then, I have been following
the business news and recently, I even invested in stocks.
Back in Germany, I started to get involved
in school politics by being elected president of student council. Part of my
position was to lead a team and to negotiate certain goals. Many people were
astonished how much effort I put into it, but it was worth it. I had the time
of my life. This position sparked my interest for a career related to business
and politics. I believe that by studying Business Administration, I will get a
deep insight into the economic world. Politics will come along naturally.
After attaining the Abitur, I have been rendering
my civilian service in a kindergarten in Stuttgart.
I supervise children who spend their free time in our institution. As we are
located in a socially disadvantaged suburb, my consciousness is now more
sensitive to social problems. As a result, I see it as one of my
responsibilities to help fighting the inequality found in many places around
the world.
After graduation, I compiled my personal
strengths and skills as well as my career ambitions to think about which
university fits best to me. Also, I thought about which university I would fit
best to. As a result, I came across the Erasmus University Rotterdam.
A very obvious reason why the EUR is an attractive
university is its internationality. The Netherlands being already very
international, the university has a high percentage of international students.
I love to be among international students because it is a great possibility to
broaden my horizon and get in touch with people I would normally never have the
chance to meet. Getting to know different cultures and habits as well as
different opinions and tastes, corresponds strongly to my nature. That is why I
see my strengths in the field of communication and conversation.
Another good reason for me to join the EUR
is its high standard of education. The education is respected for its way of interdisciplinarity
and thus ranked among the top universities in Europe.
This fact attracts many internationally known professors. In addition, the wide
range of top partner universities and student networks offer more possibilities
to better education. A program, held in English, will prepare
with vocabulary, useful and necessary for an international future.After all, the EUR is an excellent start
for an ambitious business career.
To sum it all up, I like to take
responsibility and to work in a team to achieve common goals. I am very motivated
and willing to put much effort in my work so that the results are satisfying. I
am eager to make new experiences and I love to communicate. I believe that only
the EUR offers the best education and chance of personal improvement at the
same time. Therefore I withdrew from an internship offer in the US to be able
to start my studies in September 2007. I never felt so right about one
university
Thank you for considering my application. I would be very pleased to be granted admission for the fall term.
Sincerely yours,
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ok.. thats it!!!
I hope I didnt make too many mistakes..
Thanks everybody for reading it!!! It is a pretty long letter..
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(some 740 characters..)
I would be delighted if you post some corrections.. Otherwise this is my best attempt...
take care,
ReemE