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Anonymous  +  758365 Sun, 31 May 09 03:08 PM
Hello! My name is Jolanta and I am from Latvia. I understand how important is to write a good motivation letter, therefore I would be so grateful for you help to correct my letter.

 

Dear Sir or Madam,

 

I am writing to apply for the International Bachelor of Law programme, as I am interested in international law and justice.

 

My first experience with the Netherlands was in year 2007, when for one day I was shadowing Robert Schuddeboom, the Ambassador of the Netherlands to Latvia. He also invited me to the Queensday in Riga, where I saw what the Dutch culture is about and I liked a lot.

 

I have always been interested in law as my father was a judge. I have already studied law for one year at the University of Latvia. During this year I understood that it is the best choice for me studying law, but now I know that I want to do it in the international area. The Hague University offers the exactly educational programme I am interested in. I like that the International Bachelor of Law programme offers not only the law theory, but also practicing the skills. In my opinion, it is the best way how to get extensive knowledge.

 

As to my personality, I am very sociable – I love meeting new people and also getting to know new cultures. I am also fond of learning languages, so I would love to perfect my English and also to learn Dutch. Thus, I am looking forward to get to know the Netherlands more thoroughly than I do now.

 

Studying in the Netherlands will be a great place, because it has very high standards of education. I would be lucky to study law in the Hague, international city of peace, justice and security.

 

Yours faithfully,

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AlpheccaStars  suggested by Avangi  +  758440 Sun, 31 May 09 04:04 PM
Dear Sir or Madam,

 

I am writing to apply for the International Bachelor of Law programme, as I am interested in international law and justice.

 

My first experience with the Netherlands was in year 2007, when for one day I was shadowing (shadowing has a sinister connotation; I would not use this. ) Robert Schuddeboom, the Ambassador of the Netherlands to Latvia. He also (also means in addition to, and you did not precede it with anything else) invited me to (attend the celebration of Queensday)  the Queensday in Riga, where I saw what the Dutch culture is about and I liked a lot.(Make this a separate sentence, It is a different idea.)

 

I have always been interested in law as my father was a judge. I have already studied law for one year at the University of Latvia. During this year I understood that it (it does not refer to anything, so the sentence is not very natural. the subject is "studying law")  is the best choice for me studying law, but now I know that I want to do it ("specialize in International law") in the international area. The Hague University offers the exactly (use an adjective, not adverb)  educational programme I am interested in. I like that the (fact that the) International Bachelor of Law programme offers not only the law theory, but also (practice. ) practicing the skills. In my opinion, it is the best way how to get extensive knowledge.

 

As to my personality, I am very sociable – I love meeting new people and also getting to know new cultures. I am also fond of learning languages, so I would love to perfect my English and also to learn Dutch. Thus, I am looking forward to getting to know the Netherlands more thoroughly than I do now.

 

Studying in the Netherlands will be a great place, (studying is not a place!) because it (studying?) has very high standards of education. I would be lucky (fortunate is better - you imply that you have more luck than talent!)  to study law in the Hague, international city of peace, justice and security.

 

Yours faithfully,

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Anonymous, 176 days ago
Thank you a lot!

How do you suggest me to construct that sentence about "shadowing"? We have here a possibility to shadow somebody - like to watch what  person is doing at work and ask questions, considering if we want that kind of profession.

 

AlpheccaStars  +  758523 Sun, 31 May 09 04:50 PM
In the US, the more common use of shadow is for spying on someone, looking for an opportunity to do a crime against them, or looking for their criminal activity.


I would just say that I met with the person, or was invited to spend some time with him, or tour with him, or had the opportunity to accompany him for a day.

Anonymous, 176 days ago
Thanks!

I corrected mistakes :)

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