Help with a motivation letter for a master's degree

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to apply for the Master’s Degree in Public Management [in which I am particularly interested….no value…I trust you would only apply to those programs which you are interested, no?]

My aim is to work in an international field related to public management and consulting. Therefore I would like to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge in management and practical skills to evaluate public policy in a multicultural context. [Whatever that means.] I believe a university with a high reputation like Bocconi [I dislike patronizing comments…shows a lack of creativity and investigation] is the best place to achieve my career objectives.

I hold a [four] year bachelor’s degree in French Studies and Education from the University of Sofia St Kliment Ohridski and I am going to complete in May 2005 a 3 [write all your numbers out] year specialization in Public Relations and Business Advertisement at the University of National and World Economics, Sofia, Bulgaria. I am confident that the linguistic and educational profile that I acquired as well as a broad literary and artistic culture combined with my knowledge in communication and marketing will be [] important asset for my realization in the field of public management. To further prepare myself for the program I completed a 5[number] month internship at the Community of Pazardjik district, department Education. Thus I gained a valuable practical experience in public policy and I got prepared to assume later a leadership position in public schools or play a district - wide administrative role. This strengthened my leadership skills and motivated me to serve as a catalyst for social and educational changes. I worked as an assistant of ( to be developed…????) .I tremendously enjoyed my experience because I had the chance to take part in different management tasks, for example organizing…. …( to be developed...Some projects???) [You need to tighten this up. It sounds a bit wordy at the present time.]

I would finally like to add some activities which have developed in me a permanent taste of competitiveness and also emphasized my organization skills. For 14 years, I participate in a group for folkloric and modern dances. I have recently become responsible of the organization of the dance activities and the international contests. Dancing, I had the opportunity to travel around Europe and Asia and become disciplined, …….. [Not sure how this demonstrates “competitiveness”. It’s valuable, no doubt, but I don’t see the link to the competitive aspect.]

Of an exceptional motivation, I strongly imply myself in my academic and professional activities to carry out my objectives. My international experiences attest of my capacity of integration and adaptation. I had the pleasure to meet varied cultures and to affirm my intrapersonal ease. Opened to others, speaking three foreign languages in addition to my Bulgarian mother tongue (French, English, Italian) I have a very strong desire to pursue a career in governement [spelling] institutions, thus allowing my blooming on the personal level as well as professional.

The ambitions which I have just exposed to you would not be realized without a solid theoretical background and a strong real world experience specialized in the management of different public institutions. I am deeply convinced that the MPM that Bocconi University offers is the best way of [realizing] this future because of its international orientation [too blasé]. A completion of this Master’s Degree in your school will be an excellent springboard [hate springboard…it is like saying “she will be an excellent springboard before meeting my real wife…diminishes the importance of the education itself] for my future career and will provide me the knowledge, confidence, and contacts to realize my dreams. Furthermore, the courses this program combines match perfectly my professional projects and academic expectations.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely yours,

You

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to apply for the Master’s Degree in Public Management in which I am particularly interested.

My aim is to work in an international field related to public management and consulting. Therefore I would like to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge in management and practical skills to evaluate public policy in a multicultural context. I believe a university with a high reputation like Bocconi is the best place to achieve my career objectives.

I hold a 4 year bachelor’s degree in French Studies and Education from the University of Sofia St Kliment Ohridski and I am going to complete in May 2005 a 3 year specialization in Public Relations and Business Advertisement at the University of National and World Economics, Sofia, Bulgaria. I am confident that the linguistic and educational profile that I acquired as well as a broad literary and artistic culture combined with my knowledge in communication and marketing will be an important asset for my realization in the field of public management. To further prepare myself for the program I completed a 5 month internship at the Community of Pazardjik district, department Education. Thus I gained a valuable practical experience in public policy and I got prepared to assume later a leadership position in public schools or play a district - wide administrative role. This strengthened my leadership skills and motivated me to serve as a catalyst for social and educational changes. I worked as an assistant of ( to be developed…????) .I tremendously enjoyed my experience because I had the chance to take part in different management tasks, for example organizing…. …( to be developed...Some projects???)

I would finally like to add some activities which have developed in me a permanent taste of competitiveness and also emphasized my organization skills. For 14 years, I participate in a group for folkloric and modern dances. I have recently become responsible of the organization of the dance activities and the international contests. Dancing, I had the opportunity to travel around Europe and Asia and become disciplined, ……..

Of an exceptional motivation, I strongly imply myself in my academic and professional activities to carry out my objectives. My international experiences attest of my capacity of integration and adaptation. I had the pleasure to meet varied cultures and to affirm my intrapersonal ease. Opened to others, speaking three foreign languages in addition to my Bulgarian mother tongue (French, English, Italian) I have a very strong desire to pursue a career in governement institutions, thus allowing my blooming on the personal level as well as professional.

The ambitions which I have just exposed to you wouldnt be realized without a solid theoretical background and a strong real world experience specialized in the management of different public institutions. I am deeply convinced that the MPM that Bocconi University offers is the best way of concretizing this future because of its international orientation. A completion of this Master’s Degree in your school will be an excellent springboard for my future career and will provide me the knowledge, confidence, and contacts to realize my dreams. Furthermore, the courses this program combines match perfectly my professional projects and academic expectations.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely yours,



Thank you all