This is the letter i 've tryed to write. Could anyone please correct it and give me any advices? Thank uu!!

Dear Sir/Madam,

I write to express my interest in enrolling on the Msc in Management, which is offered by *** University.

I am very goal-oriented, open-minded and  communicative girl, always ready for new challenge.

I graduated in Marketing and Business Management at *** in *** in (month). Even if I am still really interested in marketing subjects, I decided to apply to a Master in Management because my belief is that it could complete my theorical education in the best way, giving me a more complete preparation to be capable of working in different fields. ( I MEAN NOT ONLY MARKETING BUT I DON’T KNOW HOW TO EXPLAIN THE CONCEPT!!)A Msc in Management will be an excellent springboard for my future career and will provide me the basis and confidence to realize my dreams. I am convinced that in order to be competitive it’s important acquire more specialized knowledge: specialization in Management would strengthen my knowledge and help me forward with my career aim, that consists in working in a large, attractive company as a manager, preferably in an international context.

This is one of the reason why I’ve chosen to continue my studies in an English program. In addiction, I am aware of the fact that education away from home could provide me the experience of discovering new ways of growing and giving and is an increased responsibility that can contribute to a more wide way of thinking, behaving and viewing.

I believe that at Your University I could achieve what I dream of, that’s why learning in it would be an honour for me.

I thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to receiving your decision.

Yours faithfully,

***