I’ve been trying to make an impressive motivation letter for the last few days, but I think I am not very successful yet. Please give comments to my letter. I really appreciate any suggestion…
Please..help me..
Thank you…
Cyta
Here is the letter:
Dear Sir,
I am a 2nd year student of the University of Indonesia, hereby would like to apply for entrance for International Business program in the Tilberg University.
I am enrolled in the twining (undergraduate) program, held by the University of Indonesia in the economic department. For the last two years of my enrolment, I have covered the subject of Business Administration, Economics, Methodological and Analytical, Language Training and presentation skills in English.
During my study, in order to gain more practical experiences, I have had the opportunity to join an internship program held by John Clements Consultant Company. I was posted in the Human Resources Management Consultant Department and I was trusted to be an assistant to a research project [name of the project]. Throughout the internship program, I have gain such valuable experiences and insight of the business administration, especially in the human resources department field, by participating in recruiting, planning and training candidates for several multinational companies in Indonesia.
Currently, I am undertaking Master of Business English course and an internship program at [..a university..] in the United State. It is a one semester (6 months) program which I deliberately took in order to improve my knowledge about globalization, international trade issues and most of all to enhance my public speaking ability by conduction discussing forums and presentation in English language. I value any and all opportunities to expand my knowledge base and actively seek to improve my education wherever and whenever the occasion arises.
Encountering the international atmosphere, where I can interact with other students from various countries with different cultures and habits as well as different perspectives and taste, made me more enthusiastic to study in Tilberg University. I am looking forward to joint the family of Tilberg University. I even pictured myself surrounded by brilliant students in one of the class in the Tilberg University, having a heavy yet fascinating discussion with one of the professors.
As the eldest sister in the family I want to be a good role model for my brother and sister. I want them to know that no matter how far you have to go, education is worthy to be pursuit, because a good education is the best investment in life. My long-term goal is to be a professional business woman which suit a wide range of international business field, confirming a significant position in an international company or become an independent entrepreneur, bringing new ideas and efficient working style, which I would gain trough my higher education, hopefully at the Tilberg University.
I have postponed my study for about 6 moths just so I can joint the Tilberg University intake. Netherland are well known not only for their hospitality but also with many of the finest universities across the country. It’s internationality, high standard of education, multidisciplinary, internationally known professors, wide range of top universities and student networks, made me more than certain that Tilberg University is a wise choice. I am positive that the study and experiences that I will have in the Tilberg University not only will lead me to an excellent career but also will be a significant stepping-stone to the of an international future.
I would be most grateful if you could give my application form in your most favorable consideration.
Positively yours,
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