Hi

I have seen some of the motivational letters posted up, and the have been very helpful. I am expecting to graduate at the end of this year. I have started to try and find work for next year.

I had to write a motivational letter for an internship I'm applying for in June, could anyone out there please give me feedback on how I could improve it. This is the first letter I've written, and I didn't have a lot of time to edit and improve it unfortunately, since it's due later today, and I only found out about the internship yesterday.

Thanks for any help given, I really need it. The letters written below, I had trouble attaching it, so here goes....

Dear Sir/Madam

I initially became interested in ... treasury division when I attended the 2006 Corporate and Investment Banking talk for the graduate recruitment program.

I have an interest in risk management and quantitative analysis specifically, and being included in the Global Market Internship Programme would give me the opportunity to learn more and gain practical insight into these careers. It would also be an enlightening as to what other possible career opportunities available within your division.

I am very eager to get first hand experience in treasury and observe how what I learnt theoretically gets put into practice.

I am interested in applying for the 2008 Graduate Programme; the Global Market Internship Programme would give me a clear indication of whether my future lies in the Global Markets or another division within the bank.

I am very willing to learn and motivated to contribute positively to the team and any projects given during the programme.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my application for the internship programme. I hope that you will be persuaded of my potential to perform well on this programme.

Yours faithfully