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Topic: "People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer."

For people who have already finished high school, one of the choices they will have to make is whether to continue to higher education, which means going to college or university, or to start working and planning their life right away. Different people will have different choices of their own, but for me, I think there are two main reasons why we should attend college or university.

The first thing that perhaps anyone would think about going to college is to get a higher level of education. We may have studied and learned a lot at school, but that’s just the general knowledge that anyone should have. If we want to acquire an increased knowledge, especially the professional knowledge for a particular job or a specialist field of work, university and college would be the most appropriate place. Of course, going to college is just an option, besides that there are many ways to prepare for your future career. For instance, for some reason, namely financial problems, some people can’t attend college but they can still study by other means while they’re working. Still, I think we’ll get the best and proper training and education at college.

Another good reason for going to college is that you can get practical and valuable experiences while studying at college. Going to college is so much different from high school; it’s just like living in a new environment. Everyone is grown-up here, and you’ll also have to learn to act like a grown-up yourself, learn to adapt and take responsibility for everything you do. For many students, since they live in the dormitory, away from their home and family, college will be the new home where they’ll have an independent life. So, this is also where they’ll get to know new people, experience new things and prepare for the life in the future. So, besides the knowledge, it’s also important to prepare and learn what it’s like living in the real world. And the phase during which you’ll spend your life at college can really help you a lot.

Apart from the two reasons above, I think people will find themselves many other good reasons why they should attend college or university. Although it’s not always easy to get through the gate of college or university, the benefit is so obvious and you’ll have an advantage, a really good start in your career with all the knowledge, the experiences and a university or college degree. So if you have a chance, you should really consider entering university or college.
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This is one of the topics from the TOEFL writing topics.
I am sorry I will not be able to help you on this essay because I don' t know what Toefl expects. The only thing I heard is that they(teachers I mean) love advanced words and linkings.Emotion: smile
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Actually I just want you to correct the grammar, sentence structures and check if the sentences sound OK. If a sentence is awkward, please suggest a better one.
The first thing that perhaps anyone would think about going to college is to get a higher level of education. We may have studied and learned a lot at school, but that’s just the general knowledge that anyone should have. If we want to acquire an increased knowledge, especially the professional knowledge for a particular job or a specialist field of work, university and college would be the most appropriate place. Of course, going to college is just an option, besides that there are many ways to prepare for your future career.

Another good reason for going to college is that you can get practical and valuable experiences while studying at college. Going to college is so much different from high school; it’s just like living in a new environment. Everyone is grown-up here, and you’ll also have to learn to act like a grown-up yourself, learn to adapt and take responsibility for everything you do.Apart from the two reasons above, I think people will find themselves many other good reasons why they should attend college or university. Although it’s not always easy to get through the gate of college or university, the benefit is so obvious and you’ll have an advantage, a really good start in your( paraphrase it) career with all the knowledge, the experiences and a university or college degree. So if you have a chance, you should really consider entering university or college.
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After people finishing their high shcool, they faces two ways generally. One is going to higher education; Another is working. Many factors affect people's choosing, such as econimic ability, interests and his/ her attitude towards higher education and work. I think people go to college or university for higher level education and experiences.

I give an example of my style above. In my opinion, sentences should be direct. Short subject can achieve this. Maybe you should consider to revise each topic sentence of the two following paragraphs.

"Different people will have different choices of their own" is somewhat a cliche, you can make it more specific.

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2 comments After people finishing their high shcool, they faces two ways generally. One is going to higher education; Another (the other should be used)is working. Many factors affect people's choosing (choosing what?), such as econimic ability, interests and his/ her (their is better )attitude towards higher education and work. I think people go to college or university for higher level education and ( add something to clarify experience) experiences.
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