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Latest post Sat, Nov 11 2006 12:30 AM by Goodman. 1 replies.
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Sammy P  +  291638 Fri, 10 Nov 06 11:52 PM
Hello! I am currently writing my personal statement for university, although I think that it still needs some work done to it. As I am going to be studying English Language at university, I figure that it's best to get the grammar and overall statement spot on. I figure that there's no better place to get advice and ideas from than here.


At 6th form I studied Media Studies, History and Philosophy and Ethics. I achieved B grades in all three of my subjects at A-Level. This is due to my ability to meet deadlines and work in groups when it is necessary. Throughout the two years that I studied these subjects, I have become increasingly interested in the English language. My goal at university is to be able to expand my ability and understanding of English by majoring in English Language. As I may choose a career in the media, it would really benefit me to learn about the various ways English can be used day to day, and in a variety of social contexts. This also interests me greatly.

 

As well as teaching me English language skills, my subjects have also taught me other skills. Media Studies has helped me learn about representations and why they exist in the media, while Philosophy and Ethics has taught me a range of skills such as not to always accept what we are told and to look at the world in a different way. History has taught me why the world is like it is today and the reasons for it.

 

My hobbies include reading, music and computing. I read a lot of fiction novels and my favourite author is John Irving, as he writes fascinating stories in his own unique manner. Reading has definitely given me an interest in the English language. My passion for reading and music stems from my interest and enjoyment of interpreting my own meaning from both music and books. It interests me the way in which language can reveal a person’s identity and status; and this is an important factor in both music and fiction. I have always enjoyed computing, both inside and outside studies. I studied GNVQ ICT, which helped me improve my ICT skills. I try to use computers whenever I can to aid my work. I often use the internet for research and I word process whenever I can.

Over the past summer, I have had a full-time job working on a leisure park. This has helped me to work as a team, as well as giving me experience of what it is like to have a job in the workplace. In addition, this helped me build up confidence of meeting new people and improve my communication skills.

To balance my academic studies, I enjoy playing a lot of sports. I play football on a regular basis, and jog occasionally in order to maintain good physical fitness. I am a member of my local snooker club and play on a weekly basis. In addition, I am a keen course fisherman, which I also enjoy doing greatly. Furthermore, I play golf, although not at club level. I am looking forward to the opportunities the university sport clubs will offer. I am also planning to go travelling after I have completed my degree.


I believe that the time I spend at university will be one of the most enjoyable and rewarding times of my life. I realise the opportunities that a university degree will offer me, and intend to work consistently to achieve it. While academic work is obviously important, I realise that university is about meeting new people. I am definitely looking forward to and greatly anticipate this. I am a sociable person and am also looking forward to the independence that university life offers.


Any help is greatly appreciated! :-)
Thanks!
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Goodman  +  291644 Sat, 11 Nov 06 12:30 AM

Hi Sammy,

From just glancing over your personal statement, I couldn’t help but ask you, are you from Hong Kong or England, because “6th Form” catches my eyes?

 

The general impression I got from a quick glance was that your grammar is fine.  The Statement, as a whole sounded a bit too wordy and redundant which could be improved with less words. The way the sentences were structure came across as "stiff".  It’s a rather long statement and I am afraid it will take quite a bit of time to fine-comb every sentence. If you are so inclined, send it to my e-mail.  I hope you are not offended by my straight-forward comments. Smile [:)]

 

 

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