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Latest post Wed, Dec 8 2004 8:46 PM by Pea33. 17 replies.
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Pea33  +  60247 Wed, 08 Dec 04 08:46 PM
I just recently made a new thread of a poem then I thought I might as well just make a thread for all of my poems. So I guess I'll just post one here whenever I write a new one.
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Dance like you've never danced before
Pea33  +  60248 Wed, 08 Dec 04 08:49 PM
I feel as a failure
When you're around here
Much better than me
As I could ever be
So many friends
So many talents
I turn all these bends
My feelings so valid
I love you as ever
But you hurt me forever
I don't want to leave you
But I can't believe you
Pea33  +  60249 Wed, 08 Dec 04 08:50 PM
I anyone has any suggestions on how to make my poems better please let me know.

In Failure- I'm not sure how to end it, any suggestions? It doesn't seem right to me.
Pea33  +  60250 Wed, 08 Dec 04 09:01 PM
None of these thoughts go away and all the pain attached to them
I wonder why I shot myself in the back again

All of these people crowd me and all the things they say and then
I wonder why they won't go away and then

I turn around and see you, the pain I hate goes and then
I cry and cover my face again

Surrounded by embarassment and memories.



-Inspired by a song by Linkin Park.
Pea33  +  60252 Wed, 08 Dec 04 09:11 PM
I feel broken inside, left behind
Lost in my way on this accursed day
I feel the hurt pound, afraid to turn around
Don't want to see when I look at me.
Pea33  +  60253 Wed, 08 Dec 04 09:19 PM
I'm hurt, lost, confused and fooled.
I cry inside, breath alone, scared of the unkown.
Closed, done, tired and killed.
My life is damaged and undone.
Gonna getaway from the real, breakaway and heal.
Erase the pain underneath.
Get loose, forget the numb.
Belong to a memory of hapiness.
No longer wasted, lonely or hidden.
On the floor.
bhejafry, 4 yr 347 days ago
nice ..........keep it up
Pea33, 4 yr 347 days ago
Thanks!
Pea33  +  61243 Mon, 13 Dec 04 11:03 PM
Add

somethings has to change
dont know what or how

to the end of "failure"

Thanks too ybblueeyes for the suggestion for the ending!
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