Hello,
I had to write a statement of purpose for my stay abroad (Erasmus). Would someone read it and give me some hints concerning vocabulary or syntax?
Thank you very much for your effort!
Dear Sir or Madam,
with this letter I want to explain
my motivation to spend one semester in Norway generally and at the BI Norwegian
School of Management in particular to broaden my business acquirements and my individual experiences. I am currently
in my seventh semester at my studies in Business
Administration and Engineering (Dipl.-Ing.) and I am scheduling my stay abroad for
the 10th semester which is my last graduate semester, starting in
january 2008. After an internship I am going to finalise my studies at the end of the 11th
semester.
From an experience abroad I am
expecting a challenge in professional and personal domains and I hope for
improving my knowledge, my language ability and other crucial qualifications at
a distinguished university in the culturally and historically very interesting capital city of Oslo. Getting a new perspective on my life from a foreign european country is
one of my major intents.
I finished my undergraduate studies very
successfully in the fifth semester, whereupon I was furthermore permited to attend some graduate courses.
In my graduate courses I focussed
technically on automobile engineering an logistics, economically on infrastructure
and in business on finance / investment and strategic management, whereupon my performance was above average hitherto. Because my semester abroad is
going to be my last one, I will bring along plenty of knowledge, what keeps determined and prosperous studies at BI
Norwegian School of Management in good stead.
Among my studies I am working at the ***, an economic teaching and research
unit in the School of Economics & Management at Berlin University of
Technology as a project assistant. This is were a also wrote my “Studienarbeit”
which
deals with an economic theme concerning comparisons between
“Public-Private-Partnerships” and the traditional procurement apprioac h. In the framework of the project
work at the WIP, where I am consigned with basically technical exercise s, my skills to work arduous,
motivated and my ability to work under hard pressure are appraised very positive. By reason of a
technical relevant
third-party funds project lasting until December 2007,
it is regrettably not possible for me to spend a whole academic year abroad.
In addition to my studies I am
always interested in broadening my acquired
business-management and engineering
abilities with practical experiences. Thus I twice attended a case study-competition
of a big consultancy successfully and visited factories of the ThyssenKrupp AG
during a several day lasting excursion.
Past my degree I am planning a career in the field of management with a bias towards automotive
industry, whereas am not commited yet. Work placements and other practical experiences as
well as my work at the WIP should encourage my decision making.
I choose the country of Norway as my
desired destination abroad, because I am fascinated by this country already for a long
time. With an unique history and its inimitable residents and the terrific nature,
Norway provides a multitude of well worth knowing and unique peculiarities. Because
the language of instruction is going to be English and this
language accompanied my until my “Abitur” in an specialised course, I discern
no problems in communication during and besides the studies. Thereby I think it
will be feasible to settle in the norwegian society and to experience the
culture and people. During three long journeys, I had the chance to discover –
even if from a perspective of an vacationist – the interesting and enriching
sides of Norway and its citizens.
The BI Norwegian School of
Management provides an opportunity for me to achive the goals I expect from a
stay abroad.
The BI as the largest business school in Europe is a worldwide known and
reputable, international orientated school and it would be an ideal supplement
to my attended studies with the courses I selected from the wide range of
course options. The consequent demand to educate for an
successful career accomodates me very much. The courses offered fit very well with my hitherto
existing studies, my interests and my abilities because teamwork, ??? and ??? looms large. Studies at the BI Norwegian School
of Management would furthermore, due to the internationality of the school, provide
an insight into nationalities and cutures throughout the world. This would open
up new and diverse perspectives and is would broaden my horizon with supposably
grandiose experiences.
I hope with this letter I revealed
my impetus and my desire to spend one semester in an amazing country at an
unique school of management. I feel confident that my qualifications are more than sufficient and that I am able to
meet the postulated and the forthcoming demands.
I am looking forward to a potential
semester at the BI Norwegian School of Management and I hope I managed to
convince you of my
personatio n and my request. Hopefully you get down to a positive appraisal of my
application.
Thank you very much for your efforts.
Yours faithfully
Florian ***