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Succinum  #140270  Wed, 21 Sep 05 04:46 PM

Hi This is Amber from China. I need some help on my chinese-to-english translation work. Actually i need your comments on two versions of translation- my teacher's and mine. Because to some extend, i think that mine is better, simpler and more western style. So help me out plz.

 

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Situated on the southeast china coast, chemas-microsoft-com:officeTongue Tied [:S]marttags" />lace>laceName>FujianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> used to be an economically backward province, small in population and poor in natural resources. But this has changed since the start of the reform in the late 1970s. Taking full advantage of the special policies granted by the central government, lace>laceName>FujianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> has taken the initiative in breaking through traditional economic structure and moving toward a market economy. The substantial progress achieved has efficiently facilitated a rapid development in economy and society of tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate> and made it possible to leap to the leading position together with a few other provinces in the country in terms of economic growth rate and GDP.chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>

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The deepening of the reform and new leaps in economy are all in urgent need of science and quality personnel to back up. This has provided a challenge as well as an opportunity for lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace>, a university of science and engineering, concentrating mainly on engineering, the only local university of its type in tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate>. To keep pace with the reform and the rapid economic development in the province, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> is now on its development fast lane. The past forty years, esp. the past 20 years, have seen the number of students registered jump from less than 2000 in 1975 to more than 10000 today and specialties offered cover almost all economic and industrial sectors and fields in the province. A variegated pattern of school running has been created which includes graduate education, undergraduate education, short 2-to-3 year higher education program, adult education and education programs for oversea students. As a result, the university has entered the list of 100 selected universities in china with additional resources for further development (in the 21st century).>>

(notes: the underlined sentences are the ones that i really don't agree with.)>>

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lace>laceName>FijianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> is located on the southeast coast of lace>Chinalace>. Previously it was a poor province with a small population and scarce natural resources. Since the start of the reform in the late 1970s, Fijian province has taken full advantage of the special policies offered by Chinese central government in its system reforms.  As a result, the market-oriented reform has achieved substantial progress, giving a big push to the development of the provincial economic and social undertakings. Thus tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate> province has ranked among the best nationally in both economic growth and GDP. This, however, poses a great challenge as well as a great opportunity to Fuzhou University, which is the only provincial university focusing on engineering, combined with science. In order to meet the demands of provincial reforms, the opening-up policy and rapid economic development, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> has also got on the fast track of development. After 40 years’ efforts in reform and development, particularly the most recent 20 years’, Fuzhou University now has over ten thousands enrolled students as opposed to less than 2000 in 1978 and the academic programs cover almost all major economic and industrial sectors and fields related to Fujian province. Meanwhile, a multi-level, multi-discipline and multi-form schooling structure has taken form, covering all education for post-graduates, undergraduates, junior college students, adults and overseas students. Furthermore, Fuzhou University has been listed as one of 100 National Key Universities with additional resources for further development.>>

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Succinum  #140275  Wed, 21 Sep 05 05:05 PM

Something was wrong. Let me post it again.

 

My teacher's

Situated on the southeast china coast, chemas-microsoft-com:officeTongue Tied [:S]marttags" />lace>laceName>FujianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> used to be an economically backward province, small in population and poor in natural resources. But this has changed since the start of the reform in the late 1970s. Taking full advantage of the special policies granted by the central government, lace>laceName>FujianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> has taken the initiative in breaking through traditional economic structure and moving toward a market economy. The substantial progress achieved has efficiently facilitated a rapid development in economy and society of tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate> and made it possible to leap to the leading position together with a few other provinces in the country in terms of economic growth rate and GDP.chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>

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The deepening of the reform and new leaps in economy are all in urgent need of science and quality personnel to back up. This has provided a challenge as well as an opportunity for lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace>, a university of science and engineering, concentrating mainly on engineering, the only local university of its type in tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate>. To keep pace with the reform and the rapid economic development in the province, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> is now on its development fast lane. The past forty years, esp. the past 20 years, have seen the number of students registered jump from less than 2000 in 1975 to more than 10000 today and specialties offered cover almost all economic and industrial sectors and fields in the province. A variegated pattern of school running has been created which includes graduate education, undergraduate education, short 2-to-3 year higher education program, adult education and education programs for oversea students. As a result, the university has entered the list of 100 selected universities in china with additional resources for further development (in the 21st century).>>

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lace>laceName>FijianlaceName> laceType>ProvincelaceType>lace> is located on the southeast coast of lace>Chinalace>. Previously it was a poor province with a small population and scarce natural resources. Since the start of the reform in the late 1970s, Fijian province has taken full advantage of the special policies offered by Chinese central government in its system reforms.  As a result, the market-oriented reform has achieved substantial progress, giving a big push to the development of the provincial economic and social undertakings. Thus tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate> province has ranked among the best nationally in both economic growth and GDP. This, however, poses a great challenge as well as a great opportunity to Fuzhou University, which is the only provincial university focusing on engineering, combined with science. In order to meet the demands of provincial reforms, the opening-up policy and rapid economic development, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> has also got on the fast track of development. After 40 years’ efforts in reform and development, particularly the most recent 20 years’, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> now has over ten thousands enrolled students as opposed to less than 2000 in 1978 and the academic programs cover almost all major economic and industrial sectors and fields related to tate>lace>Fujianlace>tate> province. Meanwhile, a multi-level, multi-discipline and multi-form schooling structure has taken form, covering all education for post-graduates, undergraduates, junior college students, adults and overseas students. Furthermore, lace>laceName>FuzhoulaceName> laceType>UniversitylaceType>lace> has been listed as one of 100 National Key Universities with additional resources for further development.>>

  
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