Hello, I've made some corrections in bold and the highlighted areas are other problems that I've left you to work out for yourself. Your main problems are with prepositions and articles. You are missing out lots of these. You also have a lot of problems with punctuation and are just putting lots in at random. Don't leave a space before any punctuation, such as commas. Stop using random rows of full stops (periods) as punctuation, it doesn't mean anything. An ellipsis ... (three dots only) can be used in some circumstances but you shouldn't over-use it, and most of yours are not being used appropriately.

Though again..., What had I done in a whole year? After Christmas, we went on the gospel trip to small villages. One was " Myint Kyo" and another one was “Kyawe da Nyin Gone" (buffalo....village). The journey was so hard, especially as it was over a long distance; the first thing we rode was the train, then there was a long car journey, a pony-cart, a car and a canoe ... and then we arrived at “Myit kyo”village.

When we arrived at the village I felt that ????..and then, at that night our performance has been good recently such as drama, mime, puppet show, solo, Duet, Group song and Burmese dance with play a joke..this part doesn't make sense.We finished at 1:30am.

The next day, we couldn't get up early in the morning, but we would try and celebrate with a Christmas party at Myit Kyo church. After that we were packed off to  another place and we went by canoe, car,  motorcycle and on foot. The motorcycle couldn’t get over the bridge so we must have walked 4 miles.

When we arrived at “kyawe Dan yin gone” village, we’ve had problems with the water supply (lately) everybody looks like jungle man... You know, we’ve been breathe dust…. No more water, no light?????? So what could we do? We took dinner first & prepared for night program and then we started at nearly 9:30pm it’s getting cold. Time’s too late but we’ve got another problem. Generator doesn’t work so we prayed a lot bless it. Everybody wait see…… nobody went back home.

Our performances was as same as "Myit Kyo" program & we finished at 2:00 am. After that we went back hostel. Everybody wants to take a rest but not enough for mat. We’ve got one mat. How could we sleep? (20 girls)We were in big, big trouble