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clarkie

#500038 Sun, 13 Apr 08 07:58 AM

this paper is supposed to be about a place that means america to me.. and in great detail im supposed to make the teacher feel like she is there when se reads it.. so can you guys help me im not very good at this. well here it is thanks brandon

Coshocton County

Coshocton Ohio is truly an American scene, from the many attractions like Historic Roscoe Village, Monticello III Canal Boat, and Johnson-Humrickhouse Museum; to the everyday life of the people that live there. Coshocton County was established in 1811. The word Coshocton comes from an Indian word meaning "black bear town." It has grown from a small frontier and farming community to a modern agricultural city since it was established. It lies along the Muskingum, Walhonding, and Tuscarawas Rivers. There’s nothing like waking up to the sound of the birds chirping or the smell of the freshly cut grass. There’s not a lot to do in Coshocton but we always find something. It’s more of a claim place, with old people sitting on their porches watching cars drive by or just staring of into the sky. It seems like everyone walks a lot, some get an early start with the birds at the crack of dawn others by the moonlight. Farm land is everywhere you look, from corn and wheat, to ripe red tomatoes and white cotton. it has its nice green lawn bricks houses fancy neighborhoods, and its not so nice brown dirt lawns and bet down houses. All in all it’s a great place to live; I wouldn’t want to live anywhere else. This is the place that I grew up, the place that I plan to stay.

clarkie

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Mister Micawber

#500074 Sun, 13 Apr 08 09:47 AM

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I don't know anything about Coshocton, Ohio, but I will fix your punctuation:

Coshocton County

Coshocton, Ohio, is a truly American scene, from the many attractions like Historic Roscoe Village, Monticello III Canal Boat, and Johnson-Humrick House Museum to the everyday life of the people that live there. Coshocton County was established in 1811. The word Coshocton comes from an Indian word meaning "black bear town". It has grown from a small frontier and farming community to a modern agricultural city since it was established. It lies along the Muskingum, Walhonding, and Tuscarawas Rivers. There is nothing like waking up to the sound of the birds chirping or the smell of the freshly cut grass. There is not a lot to do in Coshocton, but we always find something. It is more of a claim (?) place, with old people sitting on their porches watching cars drive by or just staring off into the sky. It seems like everyone walks a lot; some get an early start with the birds at the crack of dawn and others by the moonlight. Farm land is everywhere you look, from corn and wheat to ripe red tomatoes and white cotton. It has its nice green lawns, brick houses, and fancy neighborhoods, but also its not so nice brown dirt lawns and ~~bet~~ broken? down houses. All in all, it is a great place to live; I wouldn’t want to live anywhere else. This is the place that I grew up and the place that I plan to stay.

What is a 'claim place'?

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clarkie

#500467 Mon, 14 Apr 08 08:31 AM

is this any better? thanks again

Coshocton, Ohio, is a truly American scene, from the many attractions like Historic Roscoe Village, Monticello III Canal Boat, and Johnson-Humrick House Museum to the everyday life of the people that live there. Coshocton County was established in 1811. The word Coshocton comes from an Indian word meaning "black bear town". It has grown from a small frontier and farming community to a modern agricultural city since it was established. It lies along the Muskingum, Walhonding, and Tuscarawas Rivers. There is nothing like waking up to the sound of the birds chirping or the smell of the freshly cut grass. There is not a lot to do in Coshocton, but we always find something. It is more of a calm place, with old people sitting on their porches rocking in there swings or chairs watching cars drive by, talking about the weather or just staring off into the sky. It seems like everyone walks a lot; some get an early start with the birds at the crack of dawn and others by the moonlight. Farm land is everywhere you look, from corn and wheat to ripe red tomatoes and white cotton. It has its nice green lawns, brick houses, and fancy neighborhoods, but also its not so nice brown dirt lawns and broken down houses. All in all, it is a great place to live; I wouldn't want to live anywhere else. This is the place that I grew up and the place that I plan to stay.

clarkie

Mister Micawber

#500546 Mon, 14 Apr 08 01:53 PM

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Yes, but it needs to be divided into paragraphs so that the reader can see and follow the organization easier:

Coshocton, Ohio, is a truly American scene, from the many attractions like Historic Roscoe Village, Monticello III Canal Boat, and Johnson-Humrick House Museum to the everyday life of the people that live there.

Coshocton County was established in 1811. The word "Coshocton" comes from an Indian word meaning "black bear town". It has grown from a small frontier and farming community to a modern agricultural city since it was established. It lies along the Muskingum, Walhonding, and Tuscarawas Rivers.

There is nothing like waking up to the sound of the birds chirping or the smell of the freshly cut grass. There is not a lot to do in Coshocton, but we always find something. It is ~~more of~~ a calm place, with old people sitting on their porches rocking in there swings or chairs watching cars drive by, talking about the weather or just staring off into the sky. It seems like everyone walks a lot; some get an early start with the birds at the crack of dawn and others by the moonlight.

Farm land is everywhere you look, from corn and wheat to ripe red tomatoes and white cotton. It has its nice green lawns, brick houses, and fancy neighborhoods, but also its not so nice brown dirt lawns and broken down houses.

All in all, it is a great place to live; I wouldn't want to live anywhere else. This is the place that I grew up and the place that I plan to stay.

Mister Micawber

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