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#511094 Thu, 08 May 08 07:34 AM

Can someone check my paragraph to see if all my grammer is correct i just want to see if i improve a little. Thanks! to those who correct my mistake

Writing is one of the powerful tools that a person can have because it expresses who we are as a person. It’s a key to achievement in school, in the workplace, Writing equips you with the communication and thinking skills you need to participate effectively in today democracy. In today society men and women have different way of writing. Men write sloppier and women write nicer. Women tend to have a better writing skill than men, because typically stereotype for women is that they are smart and they have good writing skill. Men tend to be more on an aggressive side when it comes to writing, because the way that they write is more like how men would write they would usually write in a tone that should sound like it should be written by men and not a woman. Women write beautiful handwriting and men write like a comic style writing. Therefore, Men and Women all have the same writing skill it’s not about who write better or not because some women may write like how men would write and some men may write like how women would write it’s just a stereotypical thing we have for how men and women write.

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Mister Micawber

#511188 Thu, 08 May 08 12:51 PM

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I have underlined some problem areas:

Writing is one of the powerful tools that a person can have because it expresses who we are as a person. It’s a key to achievement in school, in the workplace, Writing equips you with the communication and thinking skills you need to participate effectively in today democracy. In today society men and women have different way of writing. Men write sloppier and women write nicer. Women tend to have a better writing skill than men, because typically stereotype for women is that they are smart and they have good writing skill. [Your logic fails you here.] Men tend to be more on an aggressive side when it comes to writing, because the way that they write is more like how men would write [ Another short-circuit in your logic throughout this sentence ] they would usually write in a tone that should sound like it should be written by men and not a woman. Women write beautiful handwriting and men write like a comic style writing. Therefore, Men and Women all have the same writing skill it’s not about who write better or not because some women may write like how men would write and some men may write like how women would write it’s just a stereotypical thing we have for how men and women write.

This essay is a miserable failure of logic and expression, and no amount of grammar correction can save it. Start again with a different topic.