Is this paragraph proper, or would you change it a bit?

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dkg  #574184  Tue, 07 Oct 08 06:01 PM
Just think of the hundreds of people you already know, who would love the chance to own their own online business (friends, family, co-workers, etc.), especially one that pays them $6 over and over. That's an easy $600 or more in your pocket just for making a few phone calls to your relatives (something you've been meaning to do anyway), telling your social networking buddies about your Mini-Site (great for those with really huge contact lists - you even get really great banners and text ads to help direct people to "where the money's at": your Mini-Site, of course) or just by casually bringing it up in a conversation while at work or at school. Of course, we provide you with all of the materials needed to lure hundreds and thousands of people to your Mini-Site each day, but before even lifting a finger to use any of that stuff, you can take some simple initiative on your own and make 1000s of dollars by working the business from the inside-out.
  
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