Paragraph Suggestions

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I suppose that this is a vocabulary and composition assignment from your teacher, but this style of writing is inappropriate for such mundane topics.  I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate metaphors and other words:


My computer, the caretaker of my studies, lies over the flat table at the other side of my desk. Although it is a machine but in my weak spellings and grammar, it is a life saver. Usually it does my long sentences and paragraph’s final revision is done by it. A heavy monitor is lying on the top with a gray protected shield and some sack of books and a cd stand beside it. Just below I see my easy-to-press keyboard carrying the soft sound keys on it. Two audio speaker’s stands at each side of monitor like high trees surround the valley. The fast-pace mouse is firmly stays [verb is appropriate?-- No] on the top of the black sponge pad, next to the keyboard. Down on the shelf stands the nerve center, the central control processing unit with its complicated integrated system. In front of table, I see a small frail stool resting on my bright carpet’s outer rim.

 

Hello guys i have made not much but few changes could you plz check my descriptive paragraph for grammar check only Thanks!

 

My combined study partner, Computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a goldsmith wrought the gold. A rhomb shaped monitor, with cling gray screen, held on the top of the table. Just below I see my easy-to-press keyboard, with special grouped keys on it. The mouse lies quietly on black sponge pad next to the keyboard. Two audio speakers’ stands at each side of the monitor, with the attached headphone set. All these components connected through wavy cables to the nerve centre, Central processing unit placed at the end shelf of the table. The evening rays, entering through the window, cast a gradient of colors on my smooth carpet lying beneath.

 

My combined study partner,computer is lying on the russet table nearby the desk. Its versatility assists me adeptly in studies. Although it is a machine but profoundly alter my feeble grammar like a goldsmith wrought the gold.

 

Thanks Mister Micawber,

Please tell me why this underline is incorrect. i have used these words with known meaning. And wrought mean shaped, so why its wrong here ?

All these components connected through wavy cables to the nerve centre, Central processing unit placed at the end 

connected is wrong word? please tell me why and wavy mean twisted cables , thats not sutibale as well?

central is lined because i used capital C?  shelf of the table  please do explain why its wrong as well. 

 

Thanks for pointing out my mistakes Mister Micawber !

Well i have change the whole point and rephrase: Please check these sentences

My computer, a great cyber tutor plays like a helper in the crucial times of my studies (phrase ok or too long?), lies on the russet computer desk. Certain installed applications and language tools assist me deftly, while also allow me to rectify my grammar and typos in sentences.

Also the second last sentence with few changes:

The speedy mouse sits (verb ok?) quietly on black sponge pad next to the keyboard.

And CPU sentence i have rephrase it:

All these peripherals are connected through curvy wires to the box unit known as CPU at the end shelf of the desk.

Now i change table with desk  

Thanks again :)