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tazeri  #514999  Sat, 17 May 08 09:58 PM
Hi everybody,

I'm working on  my personal stetement for postgraduate programme (Media and Communications Studies). I've managed to put there everything I wanted, but I'm not sure whether it's uderstandable, gramatically correct, atc.

Any advice appreciated!

Thankx.

T.

 

Dear Sir or Madam:

My interest in media studies dates back to my years at high school when I started to realize how mass media and new means of communication change our everyday lives. I had a chance to observe a huge media system transformation in my country. After years of limited and communist government ruled media scene there were first commercial channels, advertising upswing and later on also mobile phones and internet hype. This experience influenced my decision to pursue undergraduate education in the field. 

During my undergraduate studies I had the opportunity to be exposed to the wide range of practical journalism courses and media studies courses. The Media Studies and Journalism programme at the Faculty of Social Studies offered us a chance to explore not only news writing, web page creating and photography but also courses focused on media research techniques, critical media thought, media audiences and media effects. During my studies at the Masaryk’s University I’ve realized that I would like to extend my knowledge of media theory and research in the future.

The first opportunity for independent research work was my final thesis. I decided to explore the way in which woman’s glossy magazines represent green goods and green consumerism in general. The experience of designing and conducting the research by myself belongs to the most valuable gains from the undergraduate programme. The results of my final thesis were published in a journal specializing in environmental topics.

Faculty of Social Studies has an excellent reputation for its demanding and up to date courses. With a grade average of 1.67 I belonged to the top quartile of the students on the course. 

As my related work experience is concerned I already had a chance to benefit from the university gained knowledge in the professional field. In 2006 I was volunteering for a non-profit Fair Trade organization in Brno. I was responsible for media activities such as press releases and press briefings. Currently I’m taking part in an internship with the A.B.C company which is one of the biggest producers of medical goods in the Czech Republic. At the position of a Brand Manager trainee I had a chance to work on advertising campaigns and customer researches. It was an excellent opportunity to see the commercial media world from the client’s point of view which involves all the advertising deals and media lobbying.

In terms of a future career, I see myself either working in media research (commercial or university based) or finding a placement in within advertising business. 

In my studies towards a master’s degree, I hope to extend my knowledge on the subjects such as environmental discourse in media, gender and minority media representation and the impact of new media upon society. I was glad to find out that these topics belong to the research interests of the Centre for Mass Communication Research and some of them are covered in the courses offered. Another reason to take the Masters Programme in Mass Communications at your Department is its long established tradition of media research, wide variety of related learning resources and academics who are involved in the current research in the field. I’m also attracted by the possibility of studying in the multicultural setting of the University of X.

As stated above, I’m highly interested in pursuing my master’s degree in Mass Communications. As I am aware of the superb reputation of the Department of Media and Communication I hope you will give me a chance of continuing my studies at your institution.

Best regards,

X.Y 

 

  
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tazeri  #516210  Tue, 20 May 08 08:47 PM
 Really there's nobody who could help me with this one?

T. 

  
optilang  #516270  Tue, 20 May 08 11:24 PM
 My interest in media studies dates back to my years at high school when I started to realize how mass media and new means of communication change our everyday lives. I had a chance to observe the huge transformation of the media system in my country. After years of controlled media by a communist government there were the first commercial channels, an advertising upswing and later on the mobile phone and internet explosion. This experience influenced my decision to pursue an undergraduate education in the field.

During my undergraduate studies I had the opportunity to see the wide range of practical journalism and media studies courses. The Media Studies and Journalism programme at the Faculty of Social Studies offered us a chance to explore not only news writing, web page creation and photography but also the course focused on media research techniques, critical media thought, media audiences and media effects. During my studies at the Masaryk’s University I realized that I would like to extend my knowledge of media theory and research in the future.

The first opportunity for independent research work was my final thesis. I decided to explore the way in which woman’s glossy magazines represent green goods and green consumerism in general. The experience of designing and conducting the research by myself was one of the most valuable gains from the undergraduate programme. The results of my final thesis were published in a journal specializing in environmental topics.

The Faculty of Social Studies has an excellent reputation for its demanding and up to date courses. With a grade average of 1.67 I was in the top 25% of the students on the course.

As far as my related work experience is concerned I have already had a chance to benefit from the university gained knowledge in the professional field. In 2006 I volunteered for a non-profit Fair Trade organization in Brno. I was responsible for media activities such as press releases and press briefings. Currently I’m taking part in an internship with the A.B.C company which is one of the biggest producers of medical goods in the Czech Republic. In the position of a Brand Manager trainee I have had a chance to work on advertising campaigns and customer research. It was an excellent opportunity to see the commercial media world from the client’s point of view which involves all the advertising deals and media lobbying.

In terms of a future career, I see myself either working in media research (commercial or university based) or finding a placement within the advertising business. 

Whilst studying for a master’s degree, I hope to extend my knowledge on subjects such as environmental discourse in media, gender and minority media representation and the impact of new media upon society. I was glad to find out that these topics belong to the research interests of the Centre for Mass Communication Research and some of them are covered in the courses offered. Another reason to take the Masters Programme in Mass Communications at your Department is its long established tradition of media research, wide variety of related learning resources and academics who are involved in the current research in the field. I’m also attracted by the possibility of studying in the multicultural setting of the University of X.

As stated above, I am committed to pursuing my master’s degree in Mass Communications. As I am aware of the superb reputation of the Department of Media and Communication I hope you will give me a chance of continuing my studies at your institution.

 

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tazeri  #516476  Wed, 21 May 08 11:35 AM

thank you for taking time to read it and for your helpful suggestions.

Does it really make sense to say "I had the opportunity to see the wide range of practical journalism and media studies courses" ?

I mean that was attending the courses...

T.

  
optilang  #516551  Wed, 21 May 08 01:50 PM
 "I had the opportunity to see the wide range of practical journalism and media studies courses" ?

I had the opportunity to experience/attend/follow the wide range of practical journalism and media studies courses"

  
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