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Latest post Sat, Nov 29 2008 4:39 PM by AlpheccaStars. 3 replies.
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program2  +  598108 Fri, 28 Nov 08 11:04 PM
“Why do you think that many people do not socialize with those who have a different racial background than their own? Think about possible reasons for this phenomenon, and what sort of results keeping to one’s own racial group can have for society. Remember that there can be both positive and negative effects when races don’t mix.”


For thousands or may be million years ago, people used to live in separate groups around the world. They didn’t have the communication technology as we already have it now, they have been lived in absolute different cultures.Now, after the human development, cultures start contact each other.

Every being on this planet, whether fish, bird or mammal, has a preference for its own kind, and defends its territory against real or not real threats. It's a common theme, people do tend to naturally gravitate to whom they are most like, and loathe of everything is not consistent with.

 Sometimes it is the sense of priority or feeling of superior, specialy when the other side came from a backward society. Sometimes this sense is involuntary and not known cause. It passed down in families, in cultures…not examined.

The different racial occasionally, lead to the racism which it give rise to increasing of crimes and destroy and disruption of community development.
Some people, in spite of being brought up with the idea that all people are equal, they are racist. It is insecure and lack understanding of other party.

In other side, specially from the viewpoint of medical, they find that the mixing of race is produce more healthy society because, “as everyone knows” that repeated mating within the same race lead to the emergence of diseases appear only in one race.

More over, the community consisting of different races help to develop society, and benefit from the traditions through the exchange of expertise and fill gaps that may be present in one of them.

Educational significant role in deepening the sense of this assistance or to get rid of it. I think that schools where students of different races helps to accept the issue of co-existence.
If the system continues, after several generations, we will find communities become more homogenization, and the sense of ethnic will disappear because every one will know that he came from the same type that the other came from.

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AlpheccaStars  +  598257 Sat, 29 Nov 08 03:08 AM
Program:

You essay has many statements that are factually questionable, and many problems with grammar. It will help you a lot if you make a title (a topic that  you will defend), list the main points you want to make on the topic, order the points logically, and then write a paragraph for each point. Example:

Topic: Racial prejudice is a problem today, but will disappear in the future.

1) We have racial prejudice today because...

2) People do not socialize with people from other cultures today because.... 

a)... b).. c)..

3) The positive aspects of races not socializing with other races are ...

4) The positive aspects of races socializing with other races are.

5) (Conclusion) There are forces present today which will reduce prejudice... and therefore

 


For thousands of or may be million (it's not clear that modern humans have existed millions of years)  years ago, people used to (they still do) live in separate groups around the world. They didn’t have the communication technology as we already have it now, they have been lived in absolutely different cultures. Now, after the human development (? biological) , cultures start to contact each other. (People of different cultures have warred and traded with each other for thousands of years, too.)

Every being on this planet, whether fish, bird or mammal, has a preference for its own kind, and defends its territory against real or not real threats (Rabbits do not defend their territories against predators). It's a common theme, people do tend to naturally gravitate to whom they are most like, and loathe of everything is not consistent with. (Do people loathe dogs or horses?)

 Sometimes it is the sense of priority (? wrong word) or feeling of superiority, especialy when the other side (what other side - do you mean when 2 people meet each other? ) comes from a backward (more primitive? ) society. Sometimes this sense is involuntary and not from a known cause. It (do you mean prejudice?) passed down in families, in cultures…not examined.

The different racial (? missing word) occasionally, lead to the racism which it gives rise to increasing of crimes and destroy destruction and disruption of community development.
Some people, in spite of being brought up with the idea that all people are equal, they are racist. It is insecurity and lack of understanding of other party.

On the other side, specially from the viewpoint of medical (?missing word), they (who are they?) find that the mixing of races is produce more a healthy society because, “as everyone knows” that repeated mating within the same race leads to the emergence of diseases that appear only in one race. (More often, interbreeding results in genetic abnormalities, but it must be extreme inbreeding. Give an example of such a disease.)

More over,Moreover, the a community consisting of different races helps to develop society, and benefits from the traditions through the exchange of expertise (wrong word?) and fills gaps (give an example) that may be present in one of them.the individual groups.

Educational plays a significant role in deepening the sense of this assistance (wrong word) or to get rid of it (what does "it" refer to? ). I think that schools where students of different races (missing verb, "students" is the subject) helps (missing -  subject of "accept") to accept the issue of co-existence. (I don't think that co-existence is an issue)
If the system (what system?) continues, after several generations, we will find communities become more homogeneous homogenization, and the sense of ethnicity will disappear because everyone every one will know that he came from the same type (race?)  that the other came from.

 

 

 

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program2  +  598441 Sat, 29 Nov 08 07:08 AM
dear AlpheccaStars

Thank you very much for your help.In fact, i used google translator websit in some sentences.i am still not  good in writing.i will make a new essay taking in my mind your advice.

with best regards

Majid

AlpheccaStars  +  598897 Sat, 29 Nov 08 04:39 PM
 Majid:

I have used Google translator too. Sometimes it is OK, and other times completely wrong. I only use it to get an idea..

I am happy to help you with your essay.

Kind regards,

A-Stars

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