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Latest post Thu, Dec 4 2008 2:32 AM by Mayyou. 2 replies.
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Mayyou  +  602821 Wed, 03 Dec 08 01:14 AM
I've written an essay, please correct it. Many thanks.
 A Party Member 

A very loyal member of the Communist Party of China died.

As God do not want to accept an atheist's soul in heaven, he arranged the Party member to hell.

No sooner than a month, the Yama of hell complained to God: "My God, do please take the Party member  away. You know, I have to restore the order in hell. He even managed himself to persuade almost all little devils of the hell to become members of Communist Youth League or Young Pioneers."

No choice, God reluctantly put him in heaven.

And another month later, Yama gloated over God: "My supreme God, is the party member doing well?"

God replied seriously: "First of all, please do not call me God. You’d better call me Comrade. Second, There’s no such things as God in the universe, and we all know it. And finally, I have no time talking with you because I’m hurrying in attending the party members democratic life meeting."
Mayyou
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AlpheccaStars  +  603814 Wed, 03 Dec 08 09:37 PM
  A Party Member 

A very loyal member of the Communist Party of China died.

Since God did not want to accept an atheist's soul into heaven, he arranged for the Party member to be sent to hell.

No sooner than a month later, the Yama of hell complained to God: "My God, do please take the Party member  away. You know, I have to restore the order in hell. He even managed himself to persuade almost all the little devils in hell to become members of Communist Youth League or Young Pioneers."

Having no choice, God reluctantly put him in heaven.

And another month later, Yama smugly asked gloated over God: "My supreme God, is the party member doing well?"

God replied seriously: "First of all, please do not call me God. You’d better call me Comrade. Second, there’s no such things as God in the universe, and we all know it. And finally, I have no time to talking with you because I’m hurrying to attending the party members democratic life meeting."
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Mayyou, 353 days ago
Thank you very much, AlpheccaStars!
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