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amanaz21  #88681  Sun, 10 Apr 05 07:47 PM
How do you assess the following letter of recommendation? Do you think if it is really supportive? Please write me your ideas.

Thanks in advance
Ahura
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To whom it may concern

I learnt to know Ahura Mazda very well during the 2 years he spent studying at Utrecht. I also got to know him in another, more personal way, during a 2-week study trip to Canada.


Mazda was a bright, enthusiastic MSc student who achieved good grades. In my Drilling & Production Engineering course he achieved one of the highest grades in the class. He is questioning, asking searching questions during lectures, and is not satisfied until he has fully understood the material for himself. He is individualistic, following his own path, and is not easily swayed by group thinking. In this respect he is an ideal candidate for a PhD program.


I recommend Mazda for a PhD position. I am sure that he will carry out well-founded research and he has the capability to come up with original and provocative new ideas in his area of research. For further iinformation, feel free to contact me.

  
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abbie1948  #88691  Sun, 10 Apr 05 08:18 PM
"I also got to know him in another, more personal way, during a 2-week study trip to Canada. "

** This sentence could be read in a way which you may not intend, and readers might infer that your relationship was of an extremely close and very personal nature, if you undertstand me.

The letter is fine without this sentence, so I would recommend you leave it out!

I receive the impression from your letter of an independently minded person, who may be better at solo work than working with a group.
  
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Hope that helps. Abbie
amanaz21  #88772  Mon, 11 Apr 05 07:11 AM
Many thanks Abbie. To be able to work alone is good but one should be able to work with others too. That's the reason I think this recommendation is not supportive but it even contains negative points. PLease let me know you ideas.

Thanks
Ahura
  
abbie1948  #88836  Mon, 11 Apr 05 12:25 PM
That was the impression I received from the letter.

I've added a little about communication skills, rapport etc., which seems likely, as you got to know him well in Canada.

To whom it may concern

I got to know Ahura Mazda very well during the 2 years he spent studying at Utrecht.

Mazda was a bright, enthusiastic MSc student who achieved good grades. In my Drilling & Production Engineering course he achieved one of the highest grades in the class.

He has an enquiring mind, and asked pertinent and searching questions during lectures. He is not easily swayed by group thinking, and undertook independent study to ensure his complete understanding of any and all material presented. These factors, together with his capacity for independent thought and individual research lead me to consider him an ideal candidate for a PhD program.

Although Mazda works extremely well on individual projects, he has good rapport with other students and staff, and good communication skills.

I have no hesitation in recommending Mazda for a PhD position. I am sure that he will carry out well-founded research and he has the capability to come up with original and provocative new ideas in his area of research. For further information, feel free to contact me.

  
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