Hi everybody
My name is Phuong and I am a new member. Here is my motivation letter for applying to an master program in Holland. I know that here members are experts in English, so please help me to check and correct my letter.
Thanks you very much
Phuong
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To : Admissions Office MSc Programmes
Rotterdam School of Management
Dear Sir/Madam
With this letter, I would like to apply for the Master of Science General Management programme of Rotterdam School of Management.
On the strength of my performance in the University Entrance Examination, in the top 0.5% of over 200,000 examinees in Ho Chi Minh City, I was admitted in 1999 into the University of Economics Ho Chi Minh City, one of the best universities in Vietnam. In this university, I was exposed to large quantities of modern economics knowledge about monetary & banking, international finance, corporate finance and project finance. I cherished this chance greatly and worked very hard. As a result, I achieved a good academic record during my undergraduate study, ranking top 5% in my class, and won a scholarship from Vietnam Scholarship Programme for studying in The Netherlands in 2007.
After graduation, I have worked at Ho Chi Minh City Branch of Bank for Foreign Trade of Vietnam (Vietcombank), the biggest commercial bank in Vietnam. I have worked at Project Finance Department as a creditor whose major work is to give long-term loans to customers. This job requires me to make many financial decisions base on customers’ finance statement and their investment project. In order to give a properly decision, I have had exciting interviews with a chief accounting of a big textile company about financial statement, questioned an cable television engineer to clarify his feasibility study and negotiated with a financial manager and lawyers of a real estate company about credit agreement, as well as cooperated with other bank’s creditor to draft syndicated agreement. I also have gained quite a lot of experience for working from talented managers, experiential seniors and creative co-workers in my department.
These experience and many training courses further deepened and strengthen my understanding and evoked my strong interest in such theoretical and practical issues as corporate finance, risk management, project finance, financial derivatives and international bank management, etc. Therefore, I want to learn more about finance and investment and I think Master of Science General Management programme of Rotterdam School of Management is the best programme that I can choose, because of the following reasons:
<!--[if !supportLists]-->- <!--[endif]-->Firstly, your school is very prestigious for its business research, with a broad range of concentrations, a long list of talented programmes, a huge amount of advanced facilities and a top rank in business schools in the world.
<!--[if !supportLists]--> - <!--[endif]-->Secondly, the variety of your programmes makes your school a pleasant and inspiring place to be trained. The curriculum of your master programmes such as MsBA/MBA programmes are very interesting to me. I deem these programmes my desirable course to pursue a master degree.
<!--[if !supportLists]--><!--[endif]--> - Thirdly, although I have experience in finance and investment, I think MSc General Management programme is suitable for me. Because the topics in the Foundation & Intergration Year not only integrate my undergraduate knowledge but also show me different academic points of view. And in the Concentration Year, I will have an opportunity to study my favorite subject “Finance & Investment” and to join extra-curricular activities such as International Business Project and Financial Executives. They are so attractive and useful.
<!--[if !supportLists]--> - <!--[endif]-->Lastly, I well understand the great pressure and challenges that will be presented to me when studying in such a distinguished programme as yours. But why I would like to choose a path rampant with thickets? Because I cherish the ambition to become a first-class finance specialist, with my learned expertise to investigate numerous complex issues in finance. And your programme will help me to achieve it.
I understand that your programmes are highly competitive. However, I do want to take the challenge seriously and hope you accept my application. If I am admitted, I will be very proud of being a member of your community: Besides, I would like, if possible, to contribute my intelligence to the variety and competitiveness of your school.
Thank you very much for your time and considering my request. I am looking forward to your reply.
Respectfully yours,
Nguyen Hoai Phuong