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Creativeguru  #526299  Thu, 12 Jun 08 01:29 PM

Exclusively only for you, the limited edition of *** Mickey Mouse Diamond Pendant, only 88 pieces manufactured worldwide. Grab this exceptional piece of craftsmanship before someone else owns it. Come and seize the opportunity be an owner of a marvelous creation that will be the envy of all.

 Kinldy help me to write it in more sophisticated language, specially line - Grab this exceptional piece of craftsmanship before someone else owns it.

  
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New2grammar  #526302  Thu, 12 Jun 08 01:33 PM

I've heard of " X waits for nobody". Will that do the trick?

Sexy girl: This sexy body waits for nobody!

  
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Creativeguru  #526304  Thu, 12 Jun 08 01:37 PM

thats true but it does not fit here can you suggest anything new

  
Creativeguru  #526328  Thu, 12 Jun 08 02:11 PM

I just re wrote it please correct the following:

Exclusively only for you, the limited edition of Mickey Mouse Diamond Pendant, only 88 pieces manufactured worldwide. Grab this exceptional piece before someone else owns it. Come and seize the opportunity be an owner of a marvelous creation that will be the envy of all.
  
Marius Hancu  #526335  Thu, 12 Jun 08 02:22 PM
 Exclusively for you,

the opportunity of being an owner of

 before someone else gets/buys it

  
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