Please help to correct my CV...

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Anonymous  #157861  Sat, 12 Nov 05 05:19 PM

Hi, if anyone could tell me if I've got mistakes on this CV...

Thank you.

 

 

A........... P...

R.....

4........ A.....

FRANCE

33.04........

...........@cust.univ-bpclermont.fr

Personal details :

05/05/1982.

French.

Professionnal objectives :

I want to work in the field of the electronic, particularly in the

hardware/software communication.

Education :

2003-2005 Institute of Engineering sciences (CUST) in the department of

electrical engineering. Specialized in management.

Electronics, Automatics, Electrotechnics, Industrial Computer Science,

Command, Systems and Components Architectures, Networks.

2002-2003 A two-years in one university degree specialized in engineering

sciences.

2000-2002 A two-years technical university degree specialized in Automatics.

Programming Languages : C++, VHDL, HTML.

1999-2000 High School diploma in engineering sciences.

Languages : English, German.

Work experience :

2005 Professional project : system of active security in a car based on

a microcontroler.

2004-2005 Tennis teached in Boën.

Summers 2002-2005 Postal worker in Boen.

May, June 2002 Work placement, during 10 weeks, in the informatics service in

the city of Andrézieux-Bouthéon.

Subject : to realize a software.

June, July, August 2001 Administrative agent in the biological laboratory of Montbrison.

1999-2001 Tennis teached in Arthun.

September, October 1999 Work in the catering trade, Restaurant « Le cuvage » in Boen.

1998-1999 Baby-sitting.

 

Interests and Activities:

 

 

Tennis (club for 5 years), Ski,

To read recent books,

Theatre.

 

Referees :

.....

Georges CHARPENAY

Informatics engineer

  
Clive  #157940  Sat, 12 Nov 05 10:21 PM

Hi,

I have comments more about the organization than the English.

I suggest you reformat this, and post it again, and I or someone will be happy to give you more help. I hope that's OK.

Best wishes, Clive

 

At the top, say 'RESUME'

A........... P...

R.....

4........ A.....

FRANCE

33.04........

...........@cust.univ-bpclermont.fr

Personal details :

This section is not normally included.

05/05/1982.

French.

Professionnal objectives :

I want to work in the field of the electronic, particularly in the

hardware/software communication.

State and focus on the actual job you are applying for

Education :

Unless you are applying for an academic job, put this section near the end, after work history

2003-2005 Institute of Engineering sciences (CUST) in the department of

electrical engineering. Specialized in management.

Electronics, Automatics, Electrotechnics, Industrial Computer Science,

Command, Systems and Components Architectures, Networks.

2002-2003 A two-years in one university degree specialized in engineering

sciences.

2000-2002 A two-years technical university degree specialized in Automatics.

Programming Languages : C++, VHDL, HTML.

1999-2000 High School diploma in engineering sciences.

Languages : English, German.

Work experience :

For eacj job, give dates/ your job title / company name + location. Then your duties, in point form. iewhat did you do.

2005 Professional project : system of active security in a car based on

a microcontroler.

2004-2005 Tennis teached in Boën.

Summers 2002-2005 Postal worker in Boen.

May, June 2002 Work placement, during 10 weeks, in the informatics service in

the city of Andrézieux-Bouthéon.

Subject : to realize a software.

June, July, August 2001 Administrative agent in the biological laboratory of Montbrison.

1999-2001 Tennis teached in Arthun.

September, October 1999 Work in the catering trade, Restaurant « Le cuvage » in Boen.

1998-1999 Baby-sitting. Omit this!

 

Interests and Activities:

Omit this section

 

Tennis (club for 5 years), Ski,

To read recent books,

Theatre.

 

Referees :

Call this section references, and just say 'Available upon request'

.....

Georges CHARPENAY

Informatics engineer

  
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Clive  #157948  Sat, 12 Nov 05 11:47 PM

Hi again,

I forgot to mention this. You might consider adding a section at the front of your resume titled 'Professional Profile'. Here, you could talk about your technical skills and your personal abilities that are related to the workplace.

Clive

  
rishonly  #157967  Sun, 13 Nov 05 01:26 AM
"I want to work in the field of the electronic" -- I belive it should be 'in the field of electronics'.
  
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