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Latest post Thu, Feb 12 2009 3:54 AM by Ahelaumakani. 5 replies.
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Anonymous  +  669411 Wed, 11 Feb 09 04:13 AM
    There are many reasons why a person should go to college, aside from receiving a college degree. Many people have their own personal beliefs about why a person should attend college but I will share my own views on why college is important. The reasons I feel are most important are job opportunities after receiving a degree, the atmosphere of college that promotes socialization, and to improve my intelligence.
    When a young person enters the world after high school things tend to change for them. They either go on to college or get a job. Either they got to do something to earn an income. That’s where reality hits, I end up working some crappy job or I finish college and start a career I’m going to love, and one kind of sounded better to me. That’s why I should go to college or at least to goof of for a while before getting a job.
    The another reason why I should go to college is to meet new people. Many people meet new friends and some may even run into old ones. Friends are important to have because they are there for me when I need them most. Most people move away to go to college so by meeting new friends this makes the transition of being away from home a little easier to deal with. Therefore, meeting new people is very important in life. Another reason why meeting new people is so important is that after high school, friends split up and their own ways.
    I believe that one should at least explore the option of going to college at some point in their education. Higher education opens so many doors and gives you the opportunity to examine your options in life, such as your career, where do you want to work, how much you want to get paid and so forth. A good education gives you these options and gives you a better opportunity to succeed in life. At the same time I believe higher education extends your knowledge and allows you to grow as a person. I also believe that a good education can help us secure our future. It gives us the opportunity to have a career in the field of our choice.
    In conclusion, I need to go to college and receive a higher education so that I won’t find myself working somewhere that I don’t want to be or working in some factory. There are many more reasons why a person should go to college, but these are my top reasons.
Ahelaumakani  +  669448 Wed, 11 Feb 09 05:34 AM
I can help you correct your essay but I was wondering where you are from and if the essay was for a class or an application or what.  I ask because I would correct it to be a little more formal or not depending on what the essay is for.
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Anonymous, 283 days ago
the essay's for a high school class
Ahelaumakani, 283 days ago
where are you from?
Anonymous, 283 days ago
 oringinally i am from mexico

but i now live in wisconsin

Ahelaumakani  +  670325 Thu, 12 Feb 09 03:54 AM
There are many reasons why a person should go to college, other than just receiving a college degree. Many people have their own beliefs about why a person should attend college but I will share my own views on why college is important. The reasons I feel are most important are that more job opportunities are available after receiving a degree, the atmosphere of college promotes socialization, and it improves intelligence. 

    When a young person enters the world after high school things tend to change for them. They either go on to college or get a job. Either way they will eventually need to make an income. That’s when reality hits; they can end up working in a dead end job or finish college and start a career they'll love.  The latter sounds better to me which I why I should go to college. At least in college I can goof off for awhile before getting a job.

    The other reason why I should go to college is to meet new people. Many people make new friends and some may even run into old ones. Friends are important to have because they are there for when you need them most. Most people move away to go to college so making new friends makes the transition of being away from home a little easier to deal with. Another reason why meeting new people is so important is that after high school, friends split up and go their own ways.  Therefore, meeting new people is very important in life. 

    I believe that one should at least explore the option of going to college at some point in their education. Higher education opens so many doors and gives you the opportunity to examine your options in life, such as your career, where you want to work, how much you want to get paid and so forth. A good education gives you these options and gives you a better opportunity to succeed in life. At the same time I believe higher education broadens your knowledge and allows you to grow as a person. I also believe that a good education can help us secure our future. It gives us the opportunity to have a career in the field of our choice. 

    In conclusion, I need to go to college and receive a higher education so that I won’t find myself working somewhere that I don’t want to be like some factory. There are many more reasons why a person should go to college, but these are my top reasons.

**ok, I changed a few things without rewording it completely.  One thing I would suggest is to keep everything in the same person.  Like, saying "young person" is in third person but then when you start saying "you" and "I" that is in first person.  It should be one or the other.  Also, you third point is that it improves intelligence but I don't feel like you ever really elaborated on that in the 4th paragraph.**
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