Hello, this is my first post here.
I want to apply to one of the business school in the US. I would like
to ask if you could correct the text I have written in English.
Thanks
in advance.
When I was a child, my family used to mock me of “half autistic"
because I was so tuned in tinker with devices, toys, or electronic
stuffs. When I was 7, my Dad already introduced me to IBM PC XT/AT
with monochrome monitor. I learned Basic Programming and FORTRAN at
that time. In my childhood, I used to play and try to fix my pocket
radio or my toy cars and also my broken bicycle. When I entered junior
high school, I could already assembly my own computer and got familiar
with the Linux Operating System. I also work as internship in a
computer company owned by my friend's Dad. There, I did some computer
hardware repair work and also responsible for the network and web
design and programming – and I could get small pocket money for buying
things and went to cinema.
My interest at technology was getting intense when I attended a
college. I was administered at accounting department and concentrate
on accounting information system. My accounting knowledge allows me to
look at the business entity comprehensively from one point to another,
while the information system made me know the potential and
opportunities to leverage the business entity via technology in order
to survive in the competitive business environment.
When I was writing my thesis, I took a theme about strategic alignment
between business strategy and information system strategy in banking
industry . The result showed that technology is a great equalizer and
great enabler which allows the performance of business entity to
improve significantly. Then, I took the paper for presentation at
Accounting Symposium in front of about 300 audiences from academician
or business practitioner, regardless the fact that I was the youngest
participant there, the audiences were so enthusiastic and interested to
my presentation.
I believe that technology is very important in human life, not only to
aid human in doing their daily activities, but also to enable them to
achieve much better result. Moreover, in my country, technology is
prime necessity to make education accessible to people, to improve
their living standard, to cut-off bureaucracy and eliminate
inefficiency, and to escape from the third world status.
Therefore, my goal is to start or lead a company that can harness the
power of technology to make a positive impact in the world. My working
experience at *** office did show me the complex and fascinating change
that accompany the proliferation of information technology. However,
that experience has not prepared me to run my own business. At this
point in my life, I have to make a decision: continue working and climb
up corporate ladder or pursue a business that I am passionate about. I
am choosing the latter, which is why I am now applying to the XYZ
School.
There are lots of things that make me choose XYZ to help me to achieve
my goals; and disregard the others. Most importantly, XYZ is very good
at integrating management and technology. Besides, XYZ is known all
over the world as a center for technology without a lot of boundaries
between schools and colleges. XYZ also can be characterized by a number
of very positive attributes: hard working, passionate, and clearly
driven. This is the greatest thing to build the entrepreneurship
spirit. XYZ has Center or Fellows program. The Entrepreneurial program
is also so small so that student gets a lot of one-on-one time with
great professors such as Professor A. There is a close-knit group of
entrepreneurial students who I can bounce ideas off or come to when I
am having trouble.
Some friends of mine who were the alumnus XYZ also told me that faculty
from different disciplines regularly collaborate on innovative
research, which, given the size of the university, quickly brings new
ideas, courses, and programs to the classroom. When a new business is
launched from XYZ, it is most often a combination of XYZ students,
Engineering students, Science students, etc. It will provide very
strong long-life networks, not only of XYZ students and alums, but of
entrepreneurs within the larger XYZ community.
The idea of mini-semester also makes me interested. Students are
working on many projects late at night together, collaborating on how
they should prepare for the midterms and finals, and hanging out with
the same people they just spend all week with at pub crawl. Plus with
some professors who give so much work. Nevertheless, that is something
brilliant because it enables students to make a bond with their
classmates. More interestingly, because everyone who came to XYZ is
very different and I will probably come across someone that I never
have meant in my entire life. Everyone brings a unique characteristic
to class personality, which in turn, defines XYZ community—who will
undoubtedly help to shape our future careers.
It takes ideal entrepreneurial environment in order to be an
entrepreneur and business leader. In order to build such an
environment, it needs few necessary ingredients such as a personable
environment that doesn’t feel intimidating or too large to be
uncomfortable, a group of experienced people who love to help, and last
but not least, the passion. It is only XYZ that have these three
altogether. I believe that the plethora of cutting-edge ideas that
come out of a research institution like XYZ will open many exciting
doors as I seek to gain additional work experience in the technology
industry.
After XYZ, I will either launch my own start-up, if the time is right,
or gather additional work experience in a strategic IT consulting firm.
My long-term career objective is to lead a multinational company that
will help developing countries take advantage of innovations in
technology.
Armed with XYZ degree and the knowledge on how to use it effectively, I
know that like a tiger who left his stripes, or an elephant who left
his tusks, I will rest peacefully knowing that I have left my name.