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TechMedic  #165485  Fri, 02 Dec 05 11:33 PM
Hi All,

I'm in the process of launching a small computer repair and Networking start-up in my local community. I did this site my self (modified template), personally i don't think it's very effective but as you will see i don't have a lot of creativity so that is the best i could do.
 
Besides the design, the worst part about this site is the writting, spelling, grammer, punctuation.  I was wondering if someone would be so kind as to proof read my site for grammer and spelling?
 
Thank you very much.
 

 

  
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Clive  #165494  Sat, 03 Dec 05 12:39 AM

Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

There are a couple of difficulties here. First, there is a lot of stuff on your site, and it is on a variety of different screens. Second, how are we supposed to make corrections?

I suggest that you copy and paste any text that you want us to look at, into this thread. That will reduce the amount of work you are asking us to do, and it will enable us to suggest corrections easily.

Best wishes, Clive

  
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TechMedic  #165747  Sat, 03 Dec 05 06:27 PM

Hi, thank you for your reply. 

Here is what is supposed to be the "About Us" page of the site,  It just doesn't flow well in my opinion.  Any help is greatlyh appreciated.

TECHMEDIC is a privately owned and operated Canadian company. Founded by Marcos and Mario Rodriguez after working for large enterprise companies providing technical support, project management and deployment solutions started TECHMEDIC with the goal to bring small business and home users the service level and skill that up to today only enterprises could afford.

Today's technology provides home and small business users many advantages, however, making the most of your current technology and moving forward is sometimes a heavy burden and costly proposition. TECMEDIC brings home and small business clients enterprise level IT services and solutions. Techmedic employs highly skilled and knowledgeable staff that can go beyond just the normal break fix service, but also provide a solution that makes sense for your particular needs today and tomorrow.

Techmedic is committed to providing or customers a new experience when dealing with IT issues on their home or small business systems. Up to today there has been this cloud and intimidation from the part of businesses offering this type of services to home and small business users. Techmedic's approach is to work with the users, and to provide a level or service that is comparable to the service a user may expect when calling their office tech support.

Techmedic currently provides IT Services and Solutions across the GTA and surrounding areas, We are currently looking to expand our service area throughout Ontario .

  
davkett  #165772  Sat, 03 Dec 05 07:47 PM

This may not be a perfect revision.  I hope other responders will offer suggested revisions.

TECHMEDIC is a privately owned and operated Canadian company.  Marcos and Mario Rodriguez started TECHMEDIC after working for large enterprise companies that provided technical support, project management and deployment solutions. Their goal is to bring to small business and home users the level of service and skill previously affordable only by large enterprises.

Today's technology provides home and small business users many advantages.  However, moving forward by making the most of current technology is sometimes a heavy burden as well as a costly proposition. TECHMEDIC brings home and small business clients enterprise-level IT services and solutions. TECHMEDIC employs highly skilled and knowledgeable staff capable not only of normal break/ fix services but of providing solutions that make sense for the clients' particular needs.

TECHMEDIC is committed to providing its customers with a new experience in solving IT issues on their home or small business systems.  TECHMEDIC's approach is to work with users and to provide a level of service that is comparable to what users expect when calling their office tech support.

TECHMEDIC provides IT services and solutions across the GTA (?) and surrounding areas.  We are currently seeking to expand our service area throughout Ontario .

 

  
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