Hi, I have a questions about my letter to my professor.

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Jun-god  #488005  Wed, 12 Mar 08 03:21 PM

Hi, this is first posting in this site. and english is my second language, so there might be a hundreds of mistakes in here.

Anyway. My professor wanted to us(all class members) to sumit an first impression of his class.

So here it is.

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Assignment#0 about BD3319 Information Management(Prof.Kim)
(Management Information System)

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Hello Professor X.
My name is ***. And this is a Assignment #0 you asked us to submit to you.
Okay, first of all, I think it's better start with a little bit about me.
I'm a 25 years old. and Junior of this university.(Is this right expression? I mean I am third grade of this university.) also my major is business administration.

BUT!! I studied aerospace and mechanical engineering for 2 years, until last year.
and finally, I fiured out that I AM NOT GOOD AT THIS, AND I DO NOT LIKE ENGINEERING!!
So, I changed my major to business.
Therefore, this semester, I registered in 6 required classes. And this class is one of them.

Well, now you might realized that I don't have any background of this area.:-)
But, I really DO like this stuff. I like reading books, talking with people, discuss about various events. And also I am ready to soak up every information you can give to us.

Okay, that was little information about me.
and my first impression of this class is that "It's all about collecting datas, so that people who may concern can using that data to make a decision or change their plan or something like that.

That's it.
Thank you!

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Well, please give me any advice or correct any mistakes.

Thank you very much!!Smile

  
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nona the brit  #488075  Wed, 12 Mar 08 05:03 PM

This is very informal - were you asked to do an informal letter or an essay?

Other than that, my main impression is that you haven't really answered the question - only a few words about your impression of the class.

  
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Jun-god  #488261  Thu, 13 Mar 08 04:30 AM

Oh...

Well, he asked us to do something like "pre"assignment.

and I got what you mean. Thanks^^;

But, beside that, were there many mistakes what I wrote above?

I CAN wirte blahblahblah~ but, I still don't have confidence in those writings.

 

  
Anonymous  #488316  Thu, 13 Mar 08 07:29 AM

You wrote these sentences to respond to the original inquiring post: :

This is very informal - were you asked to do an informal letter or an essay?

Other than that, my main impression is that you haven't really answered the question - only a few words about your impression of the class.

I like your use of dashes -- they flow naturally and seem to convey your thoughts naturally. Having said that your first sentence of using a simple sentence and following that with a question with  a dash to connect both is very interesting. In your second sentence, what follows the dash isn't a clause, nor does it seem to link to the previous clause in a way that natually connects them but rather have done in a way that is connecting but rather distant structually.

How can I use to learn to use a dash like you have done? I looked at online sources for help but they don't seem to go in detail about this punctuation mark. 

 

  
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