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Anonymous  #139674  Tue, 20 Sep 05 11:13 AM


Please correct my essay Big Smile [:D]

TASK: Describe the domestic tasks in your household and your general lifestyle

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My family’s life>>

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At home we live pretty much as they did in the 17th century. My father is taking care of the garden,

 

but he doesn’t do much more than that. Even though he thinks he earns very much appreciation,

 

cause of his works in the garden, he is not willing to appreciate others work, especially not my mothers.

 

She does the laundry, the cooking, and all the other boring domestic work. Although it takes a lot more

 

time to do, it’s not worth the same, according to my father’s point of view.  >>

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Except what I wrote above, my parents are spending extensive time at work. If they aren’t at work,

 

they are probably sitting in front of the computer, although they don’t know how to use it. (Probably

 

 cause they didn’t grow up with computers) I am probably spending even more spare-time in front

 

of the computer, mostly chatting in a programme called MSN. I think I’m an average youth, going

 

to parties every second week, works in the weekends and having a free year from school, like most

 

of the others in my age. You have read what I am doing, so I am not having especially much time

 

doing any kind of boring domestic work. You can’t say my parents laugh at it, like I am doing right

 

now. No, they are arguing a lot with me about my spare-time. I am just hoping you have as much

 

spare-time as I have, so you can write a message to the future, just like I am doing right now.

 

 

MANY THANKS

  
Mister Micawber  #139689  Tue, 20 Sep 05 11:31 AM

Some notes:


Don't fluctuate between verb forms present continuous is for right now (I am writing this post), and present simple is for habitual activities (I write posts every day).

Use an apostrophe to show possession, except for pronouns:  mother's work.

Work is uncountable-- my work is always boring.

Cause and because are different words.

Avoid contractions in formal writing:  I am, it is, do not.

Spare time is two words.



  
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Anonymous  #140349  Wed, 21 Sep 05 09:00 PM

Thank you Mister Micawber for your correction.

I`m a self study student in ENGLISH, and hope this site can help me to improve my english.

My goal is to be so good in ENGLISH, that I can study a year in England...

Thanks again Mister Micawber - happy for your corrections in the future

The Swedish boy 

  
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