Reality show fever in Thailand

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http://www.englishclub.com/esl-forums/viewtopic.php?t=38700

If anyone have any suggestion my grammar don't hesitate to say .

Reality show fever in my country

Last year reality show was boom in my country.The story began when Academy fantasia started first season.
Many people thought this program is singing contest as same as The star .(some people call " American Idol clone.).
After first concert had performed, Many people thought " Challenger's performance wasn't good enough "
because this program as same as other singing contest program (The star season 1 ,KPN Award etc.) and
reality show have never program on thai tv or cable tv.

Until a month ago,Many people changed his mind. He knew why TV broadcast live while challengered didn't show on stage.
Challenger began to have fanclub. someone had fanclub because his performance,but someone becuase his behavior.
Academy fantasia had be dramatic in the middle games and ended with impression in final round.

After Acedemy first season had been ended,Many television station announced to on air reality show .
Many reality show was on air that included Thailand next top model, Reality for find PR for agriculture bank ,Big Brother Thailand
,Prime minister show ( You watched about daily life of prime minister) and had rumor about reality show in jail !(but it was just rumor)
In fact many program was semi reality show. You couldn't watch him all time,but you watched scene that TV programer chose.Nevertheless you can vote him.

Many Program was changed to reality/semi-reality that included The Star season 2.
The star 2 turned to semi reality show .Despite someone criticized " Why do you copy academy fantacia ? " or " You aren't
Reality show you are singing contest " ,but The star 2 became popular in short time.

After The star 2 had been end , Academy Fantasia Season was start and became popular than first season.

The singing contest program was popular,but The album of the winner was unpopular. I think because his company can paid for his dream ,but can't support him.
Many people know who is winner ,but don't know what song in his album.

Everything can go to hightest and everything can go to lowest. After The star season 3 had been started ,many people complained
" singer in this season was low quality ". I didn't know why . Rating in this season was dropped dramatically .

In final round of this season ,every challenger 'show was kill by The secound winner of The star first season .
(you can watch in this link )
http://www3.youtube.com/watch?v=hlzcMNFG1Vg&search=Jiew
Short performance but attended everyone . After she had showed, In many forum didn't talked about who was winner ,but talked
about her ,her her .

After The star was ended,Many rumor was widespread . Rumor was about " The star will have no season 4 "
While I having been writing, Acedamy fansatasia season 3 is showing on TV . Many people complain about challenger's quality.
He know it is reality ,but singer's quality lower than he think. someone sing as talk. someshow isn't fun enough.Rating is not bad
,but it not good enough than Acamedy fantasia season 1. I think if his show isn't improve ,Rating will drop as same as The star 3.

P.S. This link is best show in Academy fantasia season 2 thai i can find.
http://www3.youtube.com/watch?v=ZmqHqF27Olo&search=patcha [/u]
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Hi, I've highlighted your errors. Your main problems are

confusion about plurals, including using 'he' when you mean 'they'.

missing out 'the', 'an' or 'a' when they are needed

a few punctuation and related problems (you don't use a capital letter after a comma). You don't need to put thoughts in quotation marks, it is better just to say 'a lot of people thought that .....'

missing capitals on proper nouns such as the show names

I'd also use the word contestant rather than challenger to describe those participating in these shows. At one point I was rather confused and thought 'Challenger' was the name of a new show.

Last year reality show was boom in my country.The story began when Academy fantasia started first season.
Many people thought this program is singing contest as same as The star .(some people call " American Idol clone.).
After first concert had performed, Many people thought " Challenger's performance wasn't good enough "
because this program as same as other singing contest program (The star season 1 ,KPN Award etc.) and
reality show have never program on thai tv or cable tv.

Until a month ago,Many people changed his mind. He knew why TV broadcast live while challengered didn't show on stage.
Challenger began to have fanclub. someone had fanclub because his performance,but someone becuase his behavior.
Academy fantasia had be dramatic in the middle games and ended with impression in final round.

After Acedemy first season had been ended,Many television station announced to on air reality show .
Many reality show was on air that included Thailand next top model, Reality for find PR for agriculture bank ,Big Brother Thailand
,Prime minister show ( You watched about daily life of prime minister) and had rumor about reality show in jail !(but it was just rumor)
In fact many program was semi reality show. You couldn't watch him all time,but you watched scene that TV programer chose.Nevertheless you can vote him.

Many Program was changed to reality/semi-reality that included The Star season 2.
The star 2 turned to semi reality show .Despite someone criticized " Why do you copy academy fantacia ? " or " You aren't
Reality show you are singing contest " ,but The star 2 became popular in short time.

After The star 2 had been end , Academy Fantasia Season was start and became popular than first season.

The singing contest program was popular,but The album of the winner was unpopular. I think because his company can paid for his dream ,but can't support him.
Many people know who is winner ,but don't know what song in his album.

Everything can go to hightest and everything can go to lowest. After The star season 3 had been started ,many people complained
" singer in this season was low quality ". I didn't know why . Rating in this season was dropped dramatically .

In final round of this season ,every challenger 'show was kill by The secound winner of The star first season .
(you can watch in this link )
http://www3.youtube.com/watch?v=hlzcMNFG1Vg&search=Jiew
Short performance but attended everyone . After she had showed, In many forum didn't talked about who was winner ,but talked
about her ,her her .

After The star was ended,Many rumor was widespread . Rumor was about " The star will have no season 4 "
While I having been writing, Acedamy fansatasia season 3 is showing on TV . Many people complain about challenger's quality.
He know it is reality ,but singer's quality lower than he think. someone sing as talk. someshow isn't fun enough.Rating is not bad
,but it not good enough than Acamedy fantasia season 1. I think if his show isn't improve ,Rating will drop as same as The star 3.

P.S. This link is best show in Academy fantasia season 2 thai i can find.
http://www3.youtube.com/watch?v=ZmqHqF27Olo&search=patcha [/u
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