Relative pronoun misplacing?

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Geybou

#250579 Sun, 30 Jul 06 09:07 PM

Hi,

If I want to indicate the product A's sale represents 40% of the company revenue in 2004 in the following sentence, how can it be done?

"In 1999 the product A's sale represented 20% of the company revenue that rose to 40% in 2004."

I think in the above sentence "...revenue that rose to 40% ..." mis-indicates the revenue rose to 40% not the product A's sale as the "that" relative pronoun refers to "revenue", correct?

Thank you

Geybou

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CalifJim

#250585 Sun, 30 Jul 06 09:35 PM

You are correct that the sentence is not saying what you want it to.

Here are some alternatives.

In 1999 Product A's sale represented 20% of the company's revenue. That rose to 40% in 2004.
The sale of Product A represented 20% of the company's revenue in 1999 and 40% in 2004.
The sale of Product A represented 20% of the company's revenue in 1999, rising to 40% in 2004.

CJ

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