revision/thought on my final paper would be greatly appreciated. thank you.

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Anonymous  #449428  Tue, 04 Dec 07 06:04 AM
The paper is in MLA format and I had some trouble keeping it in present tense, block quoting a speech from poetry, and siting the poetry inside the paragraphs themselves help would be very very appreciated. sorry its so long. also I dont know if i like my closing statement, should I add more or take a more traditional approach to it?
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frantic senior.

   (already corrected)Throughout time there has been a constant struggle between light and dark, good and evil, heaven and hell. This everlasting conflict is depicted most famously in Beowulf, a timeless Old English epic poem written in the Anglo-Saxon time period between 449 and 1066. The original creator is unknown, but was first composed by Christian monks after years of paganistic oral illustration. In Anglo-Saxon culture, along with literature, one not only had to be a strong, intelligent, and brave warrior but also show devout loyalty to his brethren. Beowulf embodies the quintessential Anglo-Saxon hero. He sails the seas to a neighboring country to gain fame by defending and defeating seemingly impossible super-natural forces, while showing his unparalleled god-like strength.(already corrected)
   
    Beowulf’s super-human strength compares to no other of his time. Several points throughout the story Beowulf Displays such strength that one can hardly believe he’s a mortal man. Beowulf exhibits this incomprehensible strength when he is clashing with Grendel. While leaning up on one arm he locks on to Grendel’s flaying limb and violently heaves, yanking so hard he tears skin, muscle, and bone clean off Grendel’s shoulder (“Grendel,” lines 265-270). Once again, in the heat of battle with Grendels revenge thirsty mother, Beowulf exhibits this spectacular brawn when he spots “a [massive] heavy sword…/hanging on the wall…/so heavy no mortal man could lift [it]”(“Grendel’s Mother,” lines 215-220). He snatches the sword off the wall like it was an ordinary feat and brings it crashing down upon the evil she wolf’s neck, slicing it clean off.

Almost equivalent to his mind numbing strength is his wisdom and intelligence that far surpasses his young age. Before making the journey over seas to Herot the young hero has to first ask for recourse from the elders. With zero hesitation the elders agreed with his request to gain fame by defending his father’s allied domain and the slaying of evil demonic monsters. Later in Beowulf’s life, at an old age of 60, he’s informed of a dragon pillaging his countryside in search of an appropriated item. Beowulf feels such a substantial amount of guilt that he feels he must act on behalf of his compatriots. Beowulf believes that anything that goes askew in his country or to his countrymen is his responsibility. “He accus[es] himself of breaking gods law”(“Death” lines 17-18) and that he has brought “The Almighty’s anger down upon his people”(“Death” lines 19-20). The old stout king, humbled by many years of a war torn life, suits up for his last confrontation.

One of the most important qualities of this Anglo-Saxon hero is his exceptional bravery, exclusively in the face of eminent death. Early in his life Beowulf is portrayed as slightly over confident. When he arrives in the court of Hrothgar and he declares:

                  “Grendel is no braver, no stronger than I am! I could kill him with my sword; I shall not, easy as it would be. This fiend is a bold and famous fighter, but his claws and teeth scratching at my shield, his clumsy fists beating at my sword blade, would be helpless. I will meet him with my hands empty-unless his heart fails him, seeing a soldier waiting

                  weaponless, unafraid. Let God in His wisdom extend His hand where

                  He wills, reward whom He chooses!”(“Grendel” lines 133-143).

After successfully fulfilling his prophecy, Beowulf hunts down the wicked mother of the forlorn beast whom he had just slain. He finds himself and his men at a pool swarming with serpents and water beasts yet he throws on his hauberk and dives through the serpents. Pushing his way towards the essence of all-evil with only a vest of chain mail to protect him.

          Beowulf, still today, stands as a record of values and customs from an unrefined and heroic time. It embodies the message: "Do your utmost to gain a good name and fame because, after death, it’s all of you that can remain in this world. It is the courage to strive for this, not success, that ultimately and eternally enshrines a true hero in legend."

  
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