Today, in the mock interview, my advisor told me to rewrite my resume objective. He points out that my objective needs to be more specific about what position that I want to work with and where (private, public, or whatever, i don't know) I want to work at. Please give me a little suggestions on how to improve my sentence. ( <-- by the way, please advise me if you spot any grammatical errors.)

1. Seeking a position at a public accounting firm as an intern where extensive experience will be further developed and utilized.
2. Seeking a position as a public accounting intern where extensive experience will be further developed and utilized.
3. To obtain an intern position at a public accounting firm that will utilize my accounting knowledge and skills.

Whichever one is better, seeking or to obtain?
I appreciate for your help.
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Hi ming,
To obtain a position in the area of accounting in a public accounting firm which utilises my accounting skills, and gives me an opportunity to learn, contribute and grow along with the organisation.

Regards,
Sri
Regular Member626
Something more like this:

OBJECTIVE: to obtain a position as an intern at a public accounting firm where I can put into practice the accounting skills I have acquired academically and gain practical experience in tax planning and consulting, financial accounting and management, and auditing in pursuit of my CPA certification.
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Thank you! This is a very well-polished sentence and you have said exactly everything I mean in a sentence. But, isn't this too long for an objective in a resume; I mean, do they allow a "paragraph"? Plus, this "sentence" is for sure stands out.
Not for the resumes that I have seen. As your instructor said, be specific - especially when your resume is prepared for a specific job application.

PS: It's still just a single sentence, you know!
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"in tax planning and consulting, financial accounting and management, and auditing in pursuit of my CPA certification."

Do you think that I should be specific to pick one from these fields here, for example, financial accounting. So that interviewer will know about my actual goal.
But, isn't this too long for an objective in a resume? -- Not for the resumes that I have seen.

This means that I have seen many resumes with objective statements this long. What 'spaces'? A resume may be as long as you think the reader has patience for.

While you do not want to fill it with non-information or stray from the topic, here are some longer ones from the internet (they do, however, overlap with cover letter material:

To help organizations meet their business and marketing objectives through the effective application of internet, advertising, consulting, project management and software development experience, bridging the gap between marketing and information technology.

Ambitious, energetic, logistic, enthusiastic, creative, flexible, self-initiating & dynamic with strong analytical skills and exceptional communication skills at all levels skills is looking for a career and result oriented job with a rewarding environment in a professional, progressive & fast growing organization with bright prospects of advancement.

Dedicate,energetic and motivated team player seeking a career that would enable me to enter the boiler operator field. Ability to work successfully in adverse situations. Innovative problem solver who thrives on challenges, excels under pressure, and gets the job done. Bright, confident and responsive individual, who possesses outstanding interpersonal skills and the ability to resolve problems and disputes.

Self motivated problem-solver well versed in computers and new technology seeking a challenging position that would use strong creative abilities to train, develop, speak and inspire. Possess effective communications skills and the ability to relate with and train persons of all backgrounds and demographics. Have an educational background in sociology and criminal justice in addition to retail and facility management experience. Possess proficiency in regulatory research and analyst reporting. Creative mind and ideas allows for strong problem solving abilities and the ability to think out of the box.
SystemAdministrator: A system administrator takes care of the inner workings of the entire system. These users have the ability to promote, ban and modify other users.Teachers: Users in this role are certified teachers. This may include DELTA, CELTA, TESOL, TEFL qualified professionals. Email a scan of your qualification to an admin, if you wish to be considered.
Okay, I understand now. This is why people need to write a long and descriptive resume objective only if their cover letters are not included on. So they can differentiate themselves in a single page resume.
Mister MicawberNot for the resumes that I have seen.
This means that I have seen many resumes with objective statements this long.
If you don't clarify this sentence for me, I really would have think of the opposite way. Hmm, there are lots of English idioms that I still need to learn from.
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