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I'm working on a group report, which is about a sales department. In the deparment, there are several sale teams and there is just one team manager in each team. Here is the contents which my group member prepares:
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Every sales team conduct a quarterly meeting to discuss the sales plan for the coming quarter. After the meeting, the team managers take about one week to consolidate the information and prepare the sale plan reports.
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The paragrah starts from "Every sales team" which is a singular. Is it necessary to keep on using singular unit such as "every team manager"? Is it no good to say "the team managers" as in the above paragraph? Ambiguous?
Is it redudent to say "a quarterly meeting" and then "for the coming quarter"?
Any suggestion?
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By the sentence, are you suggesting that there will not only be one quarterly meeting for the coming quarter, but you will still have multiple meetings after the quarter? If that is the case, you can simply make it "All the sales teams conduct quarterly meetings to discuss the sales plan for the coming quarters"
And yes, if you are talking about more than one sales team, it isn't good practice to only talk about the team managers, If you need every team's managers, then try "After the meetings, the managers for the sales teams", and now, depending on whether they usually take a week, or that a week is their deadline, you can say "have one week (or you can give an exact date to look more professional, depending if you know it) to consolidate the information gathered from the meetings to produce reports for the sales plan."
If they don't have a deadline and usually simply take a week to consolidate the information, then you can say "After the meetings, the managers for the sales teams take one week"
It is your choice to how you use my advice, and i'm sure it's going to be all wrong, but go ahead and add comments.