hello..i'm a girl who are interested with exchange students programme at *** university.
the university required me to write a self introduction essay to summit to them.
i already write the essay but i'm not confident with it.
can someone help me to check the sentences, grammar,or can give some opinion or ideas to improve it.?
Thank you very much.Below is my essay:
My name is ***, and most of my close friends call me ***. I
am Chinese girl who came from ***, Sarawak which is located at east Malaysia. It is
a state which has many diverse ethnic groups such as Iban, Sumazao, Bidayuh and
others.
There are five members in my family which are grandmother, father,
mother, brother and I. My father is a carpenter who is doing repairing
buildings and my mom is a full time housewife.I has a younger brother who
studies at yy now. I am an eldest daughter in a family and who study at *** now.
I'm an undergraduate who studies Business Admintratives
majoring in Management at ***. Over the past semester, I have taking some
business course such as business commnunication, science of management,
economic, public speaking. The process of globalisation and the increase of
interdependence of nations between each other as a result, which entail
opportunities as well as threats, has always fascinated me. Hence, I always
aimed at forming my study as international as possible, for I was sure to
follow an international career in the future. Thus, I will take additional
courses in Korea as my PB course.I have joined activities ‘perhimpunan Siswa
Merdeka Makum & Kekwa 2007' which I have learned how to work and cooperate
with people of different cultures. Besides, I have involve actively in activity
of my college and I take post as an exco for Persatuan Tiong Hua (yin hua) for
session 2007/2008.
I consider myself an open-minded, curious person who is
interested in everything that develops me, both personally and theoretically. I
enjoy gaining experiences, especially encountering new cultures and values. I
have quite a few interests. To begin with, reading is my favorite. No sooner
had we gone to elementary school than my parents asked my brother and I to read
books. They not only enriched my life but also enlightened my mind. I never go
to bed without a book! Besides, I like music very much. I have participated in
the University Music Club for past one year. Third, I am also enjoying playing
badminton.
I'm a scholar under Jabatan Perkhidmatan Awam (JPA) from
2006 until 2009.I have awarded dean list *** for semester 2, 2007 and semester
1, 2008. I have strong
communication and computer skills, including a working knowledge of Windows and Microsoft Word, Excel.
After taking my degree programme
of Business Administratve at ***, I wish that I can continue to take master
programme and contribute to society in the future.