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An Jiyoung  #385406  Thu, 28 Jun 07 04:24 PM

The various opening events scheduled in long beach, July 1, 2:00 p.m., in atlantic beach, July 2 and in bridgeport, stratford and stamford beaches, July 5 will provide the sightseeing views to visitors.

Could you check if this above sentece is correct?

  
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Feebs11  #385498  Thu, 28 Jun 07 09:49 PM
 An Jiyoung wrote:

The various opening events scheduled in long beach, July 1,  2:00 p.m., in atlantic beach, July 2 and in bridgeport, stratford and stamford beaches, July 5 will provide the sightseeing views to visitors.

Could you check if this above sentece is correct?



Proper names must be capitalized - so all the place names are wrong.

Are all the events scheduled for the same time? If not, then how is anyone to know what time to be at the events? If they are all at the same time, then this must be said
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The last phrase makes no sense. You will be better putting the visitors first.

  
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