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	Antonia  [More info] Hello! Can you please read this sentece? It is too long and clumsy. Do you have any ideas how to make it better? The next step are practical suggestions, discussion about the differences of/in attitudes, presenting arguments, considering possible favourable outcomes, concessions and clauses which can be considered to be a subject of the possible exchange and eventually negotiating the terms of exchange.  Thank you Antonia+0 Joined on Fri, Mar 11 2005 Contributing Member 1,266

	+1 Waïti  [More info] Should be 'the next step IS...' and actually I would use some other verb like 'the next step consists in...'. Also, it does not sound right to me that you mix nouns and '-ing' forms of the verb (there is a word for this but it escapes me at the moment). Here I'm referring to 'suggestions... discussions...' on one hand and 'presenting... considering....' on the other. But here again maybe I'm being picky. Waïti+2 Joined on Thu, Aug 25 2005 Regular Member 568

	+1 Antonia  [More info] Here is my attempt. Can you please tell me if it is OK? I'm not sure that all the articles are OK. The next step consists in making practical suggestions, discussing differences of attitudes, presentating arguments and considering possible favourable outcomes, concessions and clauses which can be considered to be subject of  possible exchange and eventually negotiating the terms of exchange. Thank you   Antonia+0

	+1 Waïti  [More info] I agree that all the articles aren't ok... '... subject of A possible exchange...' '... the terms of THE exchange...' Also, comma missing after '...possible exchange'.   Waïti+2

	+1 Clive  [More info] Hi, Welcome to the Forum. Write your sentence here and we'll tell you if it's correct. And it's free, yes. But in return, You have to help somebody you know and then tell us briefly what you did. OK? Best wishes, Clive Clive+27 Joined on Thu, Oct 28 2004 Canada Veteran Member 35,810 El tango argentino es un pensamiento triste que se puede bailar (The tango argentino is a sad thought which can be danced) Enrique Santos Discépolo

	+1 Clive  [More info] Hi, "Will you please accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) from here? Please do reply because I’m very much looking forward to get into University of Hampshire." "Will you please accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) here? IPlease reply because I’m very much looking forward to getting into the University of Hampshire." There are a number of style issues here. In a letter, you might write these sentences at the end, as "I hope that you will accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) here. I look forward to your reply." Best wishes, Clive Clive+27