sentence check

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Hello!

Can you please read this sentece? It is too long and clumsy. Do you have any ideas how to make it better?

The next step are practical suggestions, discussion about the differences of/in attitudes, presenting arguments, considering possible favourable outcomes, concessions and clauses which can be considered to be a subject of the possible exchange and eventually negotiating the terms of exchange.

Thank you
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Should be 'the next step IS...' and actually I would use some other verb like 'the next step consists in...'.

Also, it does not sound right to me that you mix nouns and '-ing' forms of the verb (there is a word for this but it escapes me at the moment). Here I'm referring to 'suggestions... discussions...' on one hand and 'presenting... considering....' on the other. But here again maybe I'm being picky.
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Here is my attempt. Can you please tell me if it is OK? I'm not sure that all the articles are OK.

The next step consists in making practical suggestions, discussing differences of attitudes, presentating arguments and considering possible favourable outcomes, concessions and clauses which can be considered to be subject of possible exchange and eventually negotiating the terms of exchange.

Thank you
I agree that all the articles aren't ok...

'... subject of A possible exchange...'
'... the terms of THE exchange...'

Also, comma missing after '...possible exchange'.
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Thank you once again
Anonymous:
Hi

My name is sasikala, working in a PVT concern. I have promblem in Sentence forming. When i type the senctence is correct or not i do not known.

I want to use the online free teaching for forming sentence.
Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

Write your sentence here and we'll tell you if it's correct. And it's free, yes. But in return, You have to help somebody you know and then tell us briefly what you did. OK?Emotion: smile

Best wishes, Clive
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Anonymous:
Please correct my following sentence:

"Will you please accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) from here? Please do reply because I’m very much looking forward to get into ."

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Hi,

"Will you please accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) from here? Please do reply because I’m very much looking forward to get into University of Hampshire."

"Will you please accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) here? IPlease reply because I’m very much looking forward to getting into the University of Hampshire."

There are a number of style issues here. In a letter, you might write these sentences at the end, as

"I hope that you will accept me after I finish my one year MBA (full-time) here. I look forward to your reply."

Best wishes, Clive
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