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Abil  #525824  Wed, 11 Jun 08 01:20 PM
Can someone check if there is any mistake in this sentence: "Although Mr. Smith tried to harm him in many different ways, Faith was saved and the illegal occupation of his land could be staved off because of the fact that the administration was somewhat neutral at that time."
  
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Chibi  #525875  Wed, 11 Jun 08 03:27 PM

it seems that there is little logic between although-clause and main clause in your sentence. Why was Faith still safe from Mr. Smith's tricks? Why did you mention illegal occupation of his land here? Actually, I did not get your point clearly. maybe you should express the sentence in another way.

In terms of your word choices, I suggest that it'd better to use "because" instead of "because of the fact that" :)

  
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