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#452330 Wed, 12 Dec 07 08:16 AM

"All these kindled an eternal flame for learning more and more about computer networking."

Is this sentence grammatically correct? Does the choice of words make sense and appropriate? Does the sentence as a whole sounds funny or impressive (please rate)? How this sentence can be made better?

Please help I would be very grateful to you.

Thanks in advance.

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nona the brit

#452344 Wed, 12 Dec 07 09:06 AM

It's the eternal that sounds odd. Do you mean 'internal' - that would make a lot more sense.

nona the brit

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The name says it all.

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Anonymous

#452356 Wed, 12 Dec 07 09:47 AM

Thanks for the response.

I was trying to mean that a desire that never vanished and has been continuing to exist from that moment onwards and probably will continue in the future.

does "undying flame" make sense?

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Clive

#452401 Wed, 12 Dec 07 01:13 PM

Hi,

"All these kindled an eternal flame for learning more and more about computer networking."

To be truthful, it sounds rather funny, in the sense of odd, to me. The red part is very poetic, very literary, very hyperbolic. On the other hand, the topic of computer networking is not at all poetic, etc., at least to most people. So, the two parts of the sentence don't fit together well. My advice is to reword the red part, eg

All these made me very interested in / enthusiastic about . . .

Best wishes, Clive

Clive