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Ben9108  #182547  Fri, 13 Jan 06 12:46 PM
1. Please be informed that other series of carrier's indoor units such as ceiling types or cassette types and other brands of indoor units cannot suit in the new location as result of our investigation.
(The above sentences grammar of whether it correct or not.)
 
2.Noise level of  fan(model tgn354) is NC40. It exceeds the specification requirement of noise criteria NC35.
or Noise level of  fan (model tgn354) is NC40 in compliance with the specification requirement of noise criteria NC50.
(The above sentences grammar of whether it correct or not.)
 
 
3.However, the production of walkman (model upe290) had been ceased. New model catalogue has not yet been received and we estimate the delivery period is 1 weeks subject to final approval.
or However, Sony's industry has ceased manufacturing the walkman (model upe290). New model catalogue has not yet been received and we estimate the delivery period is 1 weeks subject to final approval.
(Which sentence is the best? or give me another sentence structure if you have.)
(Use "has ceased" or "had ceased" correct in the sentence?) 
  
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Archaic  #182868  Fri, 13 Jan 06 08:29 PM

All of these sentences are unwanted in English. Try these:

1) Please be informed that other series of the carrier's indoor units , such as ceiling-types or cassette-types and other brands of indoor units, are not suitable in the new location as a result of our investigation.

2) The noise level of the model tgn354 fan is NC40. It exceeds the specification requirement of the NC35 noise criteria.

3) However, the production of the model upe290 walkman has been ceased. New model catalogues have not yet been received, and we estimate the delivery period is one week, subject to final approval.

  
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davkett  #182941  Sat, 14 Jan 06 12:59 AM
2.Noise level of  fan(model tgn354) is NC40. It exceeds the specification requirement of noise criteria NC35.
or Noise level of  fan (model tgn354) is NC40 in compliance with the specification requirement of noise criteria NC50.
(I don't know if you are saying the noise level exceeds the criteria or complies with the criteria?  Is the noise level criteria set at NC35 or NC50? In any case, make it 'the noise level" and 'the noise criteria'.)
 
3.However, the production of walkman (model upe290) had been ceased. New model catalogue has not yet been received and we estimate the delivery period is 1 weeks subject to final approval.
or However, Sony's industry has ceased manufacturing the walkman (model upe290). New model catalogue has not yet been received and we estimate the delivery period is 1 weeks subject to final approval.

However, production on the Sony walkman (model upe290) has been discontinued.  A new model catalogue has not yet been received.  We estimate the delivery period to be one week, subject to approval.  (I don't really understand the meaning of this last sentence, though it is grammatically correct--for instance, what needs to be approved?  And is the one-week period the time between ordering the catalogue and receiving the catalogue?)
  
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