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Inchoateknowledge

#241682 Fri, 30 Jun 06 09:35 PM

Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files that carries information about what has been downloaded from a homepage to Alexa.

Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files to Alexa that carries information about what has been downloaded from a homepage.

Both might sound confusing, ambigious, I think.

Files that contain info about what has been downloaded from a homepage are sent to Alexa with the help of Alexa toolbar.

Maybe this sounds clearer.

I would like to invite opinions.

Inchoateknowledge

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Beep! Beep! :)

Likeguslee

#241716 Sat, 01 Jul 06 12:05 AM

Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files that carries information about what has been downloaded from a homepage to Alexa.
Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files to Alexa that carries information about what has been downloaded from a homepage.
Files that contain info about what has been downloaded from a homepage are sent to Alexa with the help of Alexa toolbar.

If we want to explain the use of Alexa toolbar, then 1^st sentence construction is best. However, the sentence needs some rephrasing.

Alexa toolbar facilitates the transmission of files carrying information about what has been downloaded from a homepage to Alexa.

Likeguslee

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Constructions

rvw

#241718 Sat, 01 Jul 06 12:29 AM

I find it confusing. Could you spell out exactly what facilitates means, and, perhaps use more than one sentence?

rvw

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MrPedantic

#241727 Sat, 01 Jul 06 01:31 AM

The verb looks a little strange to me. I would say:

1. Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files that carry information about what has been downloaded from a homepage to Alexa.

The "sending" doesn't "carry information"; the files do.

MrP

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Verbs

Likeguslee

#241728 Sat, 01 Jul 06 01:36 AM

Rvw wrote:
I find it confusing. Could you spell out exactly what facilitates means, and, perhaps use more than one sentence?

To facilitate => To make easy or easier: political agreements that facilitated troop withdrawals.

The Alexa toolbar facilitates the transmission of files to Alexa => The Alexa toolbar makes it easier for the transmission of files to Alexa.

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Inchoateknowledge

#241788 Sat, 01 Jul 06 07:25 AM

Hi,

In "the sending of files that", 'sending' and 'that' belong together -- yes, indeed.
In "the sending of files carrying" the files carry. Do you know any other paraphrase which include 'that'?
By the way, why is 'transmit' better than 'send'?
http://www.google.co.hu/search?hl=hu&q=%22send+files%22&btnG=Google+keres%C3%A9s&meta=
http://www.google.co.hu/search?hl=hu&q=%22transmit+files%22&btnG=Keres%C3%A9s&meta=
Compare the numbers of hits.
Last but not least, thank you all.

Inchoateknowledge

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Inchoateknowledge

#241794 Sat, 01 Jul 06 08:39 AM

Alexa toolbar facilitates the sending of files carrying information about what has been downloaded from a homepage, to Alexa.
Is this sentence correctly punctuated?

Inchoateknowledge