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Writerhopeful

#349209 Tue, 10 Apr 07 04:04 PM

Please advise if this sentence structure is correct and understandable:

- Toward the end and not because her illness and weakened condition predicated her decision, she abstained from carnal desire, but was unable to dismiss the love and spiritual attachment she held for him. -

Thank you kindly

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Philip

#349218 Tue, 10 Apr 07 04:45 PM

Writerhopeful wrote:

Please advise if this sentence structure is correct and understandable:

- Toward the end [,] and not because her illness and weakened condition [had] predicated her decision, she abstained from carnal desire, but was unable to dismiss the love and spiritual attachment she held for him. -

Thank you kindly

In the highlighted part, you don't need the comma unless you repeat the subject (which I would do because of the length of the sentence).

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Writerhopeful

#349303 Tue, 10 Apr 07 09:13 PM

Thank you very much Phillip. Wow, I didn't expect to receive a reply so soon. I am pleased the changes were minor and in a way, it even boosts my confidence.

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