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Fizzi  #519584  Tue, 27 May 08 02:30 PM

Hi all,
Can somebody please help me with English?
Regards,
Fizzi

1- The business relationship between Country 1 and Country 2 significantly creates important economic benefits for both countries. The trade between Country 1 and Country 2 now exceeds $10 billion per year and continue to grow. Exclusively, in 2006, Country 1  agriculture industry export to Country 2 was nearly A$200 million.

2-  Promotion of X products is vital to the X industry for informing health care professionals about new medicines and updating for existing medicines. X promotion is regarded as one of the main sources of information on medicines for doctors and has the potential to change doctors’ prescribing habit. However, evidence shows that the quality of information in X promotion is often poor. Therefore, it is essential that health professionals become more aware about this issue in order to support the appropriate use of medicines.

 

 

 

 


 

 

  
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optilang  #519691  Tue, 27 May 08 06:28 PM
 1- The business relationship between Country 1 and Country 2 significantly creates important economic benefits for both countries. TheTrade between Country 1 and Country 2 them now exceeds $10 billion per year and continues/is continuing to grow. Exclusively, In 2006 (alone), agricultural industry exports from Country 1   to Country 2 was  amounted to nearly A$200 million.

 

2-  The promotion of X products is vital to the X industry for as it keeps health care professionals up-to-date with new and exiting medicines.informing health care professionals about new medicines and updating for existing medicines. X promotion is regarded as one of the main sources of information on medicines for doctors and has the potential to change doctors’/their prescribing habits. However, evidence shows that the quality of information in X promotion is often poor. Therefore, it is essential that health professionals make themselves aware of this become more aware about this issue in order to support the appropriate use of medicines.

I am not sure about the last sentence in 2. You have written "that health professionals become more aware about this issue" - but it is not clear to me what they need to become more aware about. 

  
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RayH  #519695  Tue, 27 May 08 06:34 PM
1- The business relationship between Country 1 and Country 2 significantly creates important economic benefits for both countries. The trade between Country 1 and Country 2 now exceeds $10 billion per year and continues to grow. Exclusively, In 2006 alone, Country 1's  agricultural  industry exports to Country 2 totaled was nearly A$200 million.

I refrain from commenting on sentence 2 because there are so many Xs it would be difficult and probably unhelpful to do so.
  
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Fizzi  #521859  Mon, 02 Jun 08 02:58 AM

Dear Optilang and RayH,

Thanks for your comments and suggestions.

Regards,
Fizzi

  
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