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Tung Quoc  #286467  Sat, 28 Oct 06 03:52 AM

Please correct the mistakes:

The government should have more open mechanisms, bodly givng sovereignty to executive board chairmen or enterprise dirctors with the concrete instructions on rights and obligations.These are the urgent issues that most general directors,chairmen of administrative board of general companies and local leaders suggested to the governement at the priliminary summing up conference on the State-owned enterprise development and renovation process  organized  in   HCMC from October25 to October26,2006, by the Enterprise administration central committee of the government office.

  
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nona the brit  #286543  Sat, 28 Oct 06 10:32 AM

The government should have more open mechanisms, bodly givng sovereignty to executive board chairmen or enterprise dirctors, with concrete instructions on rights and obligations.These are the urgent issues that most general directors, chairmen of administrative boards of general companies and local leaders suggested to the governement at the priliminary summing up conference on the State-owned enterprise development and renovation process. The conference was  organized  in   HCMC on the 25th and 26th of October 2006, by the Enterprise administration committee of the central government.

Hi, you've got a few spelling mistakes and typos so I've highlighted those in yellow.

I've simplified the structure of the last sentence as I think you were trying to get just a bit too much information into a single sentence.

  
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